audio will be up tomorrow
wrote this in 30 minutes
beat: Jedi mind tricks, Animal rap, gotti remix

Lets us begin with this sinning its everlasting
Mad passing has left me gripless wings set me surpassing

I’m harassing my character with a comedic evaluation
This is no game so go home and throw away your play station

I’m floating, this meditation has me elevated, and so I’ve waited
For this chance to take a glance and see that the sky is not tainted

These walls painted red to remind me of harder days
And how sad it is seems to see friends lost in the purple haze

My life is a maze, I’m lost somewhere in the middle
Of nowhere where white hicks use their toes to strum the fiddle

Here’s a riddle make sense out of my dreams and of my mind
I’ve tried for years and still find my self in the back of line

Behind my shadow my dad and my home town
Behind the bible my friends this yo-yo has been unwound

To the sound of what seems to take over my conscious
I dare you to not get scared and tell me its all nonsense

I haven’t lost it, I caught it, the truth has set me free
And united the thought of a muse with the idea that you can be

What you see on TV without selling your soul
Right now I’m an advocate of freedom running the streets with no control

This tole of living lies, I despise through the whites of my eyes
Once left me blind but now cant stop me from freeing my mind

I’ve left behind the dead weight and await to see my fate
And hope its not to late to tell the world I wont be fake

The stakes are set high but my goals are set higher
I take the burns in stride while attempting to fight the fire

Ill walk the wire if it leads to the lime light
Posed for gorilla warfare I refuse to loose my sight

With all my might, ill scream till my lungs bleed
So you can understand my plan and exactly what I see

Is more then signing CDs in the back of a record store
The whole idea of being hungry is that your always wanting more

So what’s in store for me? This crystal ball is out of order
I count the days to destiny and see the time is growing shorter

This disorder that I live with I also call my gift
I raise my hands to the heaven and ask god for final a lift

Because this swift tide has carried me so far from home
But at least I can say when its over I didn’t have to do it alone

i like it think it was a great peace few reworks neeeded but a wordplay and thought was phenom

wwhat would u do to make it better?

Flow was good, concepts were good, vocab was good but not great. Kept it simple, but it works. I thought it was ill.

I liked readin this,had me hooked.

"The stakes are set high but my goals are set higher
I take the burns in stride while attempting to fight the fire

Ill walk the wire if it leads to the lime light
Posed for gorilla warfare I refuse to loose my sight"

nice lines,keep writin.Stay ^
-Avi

its always good to be back
thanks for the words

i would use more dialect and colorful descriptive words not that what you used didnt work cause it did but word content can amplify a peace or over simplify......

i dunno i guess its just my style. shit sounds crazy in the flow. ill try and get the audio up today so u can get what im saying
peace

AIGHT I WILL PEEP IT FOR SURE