This Is A Litte Freestyle About Sumthin That Happened Recently!
These are my true feelings that i just had to get out!


My night was started with a dramatic phone call to my girl//
I Broke up with her over something that crushed my world//
But a knock on the hotel door was about to change my life//
I opened it and my breath was gone like being stabbed by a knife//
there stood a girl and i knew straight away i wanted her as my wife//
Things started slow and my boy tried it on with this hunny//
But he got the blow, he said the wrong thing which was quite funny//
you couldn't change her body with any amount of money//
Now take the time to listen as i explain fully//
Her eyes sparkled like they had diamonds inside//
My knees where about to crumble like a land slide//
I couldn't say a word i was still in too much shock//
It was like someone had frozen my thoughts by hitting me with a rock//
I can't stop thinking of her, more and more i get locked//
But i still can't speak to her she looks so good//
my heart pumped so fast it sent bubbles in my blood//
for the first time in my life i'm truely in love//
But after some drinks my courage was up and i spoke//
i struggled to get out my words i thought i'd choke//
if she turned her back on me my heart would be broke//
The night passed on and we ended up on the beach//
we kissed and life was so out of reach//
I wanted to stay stuck to her like a leach//
every time she touched me i burned up like being soaked in bleach//
the waves where crashing on the rocks and i had to check//
coz my blood was on fire from her kissing on my neck//
there was nothin more Beautiful than the feel of her breath//
the beach is empty now and everyone has left//
i'm supprised that she never noticed the pounding from my chest//
these nights went on for an entire week//
this is scrary coz she knocked me off my feet//
i've never felt like this before and never want it to end//
i couldn't put up with her just being as friend//
i'd be well fucked up it would drive me round the bend//
it feels like i have the world in my hands//
it feels better than being mobbed by my fans//
i'm never gonna stop loving her i'll do what i can//
now that i've found her i am a complete man//
theres no way i could treat her as a one-night-stand//
she means to much to me to let go of her hand//
now that i'm back from my holiday we've met up//
she's so amazing i could never give her up//
i'll phone her at night just to say wats up//
not one chance in this world will she slip away//
i'd marry her now so she is here to stay//
and i love her more and more each day//


FOR JACQUI

^^^ thats deep dawg......*wipes tears* send that ish to her yo.

yeah that was a tight freestyle, the fact that it's true adds to it's attraction!

overall 8/10

Thanx for the feed back yo'

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Good lil' piece here yo.. what made it so worthy was that it
was all true.. Real ish! Good little way to release your NRG.
Hard Piece...
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Keep The Shit Comin Peeps ! ! !

simple vocab and shit.. deep emotions in it though.. I was feelin' the flow fo-sure.. "But after some drinks my courage was up and i spoke//
i struggled to get out my words i thought i'd choke//
if she turned her back on me my heart would be broke//
The night passed on and we ended up on the beach//
we kissed and life was so out of reach//"... I liked it.. good imagery.. 1.. peep my shit.. "running through Life..

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thanx dawg nice feed back ....


Remember this aint a battle verse its a sort of poem thingie ...

That was pretty tight, i like this line cause everyones got that one girl that means something to them......


"i'm never gonna stop loving her i'll do what i can
now that i've found her i am a complete man
theres no way i could treat her as a one-night-stand"

Yeh Dawg Thanx ...

But this girl dont just mean something to me she means everything to me ... I even gave up my Job to be with her and sold my Moterbike. Crazy Shit i know but she's worth it ...

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Now take the time to listen as i explain fully//
Her eyes sparkled like they had diamonds inside//
My knees where about to crumble like a land slide//
I couldn't say a word i was still in too much shock//
It was like someone had frozen my thoughts by hitting me with a rock//

Definitely a heart felt piece...I should do this for my girl lol. Good drop

Deep shit dawg,,,,,,,,This was tight....keep spittin

Thanx People ...

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