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Old 07-26-03, 05:34 PM   #1
Verbatim
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I wanna be just like streetslang when he spits
he sucks so bad, he steals other peoples shit
bitch you go on other sites and copy and paste
leave this site man, your outta place
you like ja rule stealing tupac's verses
your homosexual, probly carryin purses
coming on here claiming you can rhyme
stealin ppl's shit like damn this shit's mine
like damn i know that i'm whack
but fuck, stealin ppl's shit how whack is that

i wanna be just like you
i wanna do what you do
cause stealin shit is coo
i can't rap, but neither can you

i don't really care if you diss me back
cause you probly stole your verse from another cat
changed the words around and put in my name
don't even bother, you ain't got no flame
your lame a shame to the game
so create a new account a new name
you ain't got no lyrical skill
jesus dawg, i'm more fuckin ill
and that's pretty bad if you ask anyone
but fuck this bitch, your outdone

i wanna be just like you
i wanna do what you do
cause stealin ppl's shit is coo
i can't rap, but neither can you

nothin special, uppin,
and yeh i know my wordplay was weak (i'm workin on it)
peace
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Old 07-26-03, 08:06 PM   #2
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ok no beef, but the style seems forced like ya tryna be sum1, like MnM. erm, be original and well be yaself and express ya true feelings, ur feelings or secondary and come off eminem through which u like the fashion he Xpressez and thus u interpret this into ur own....blah blah blah L-E-Vieght soon
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Old 07-26-03, 08:36 PM   #3
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^ Werd to the eminem. .

Dont base your style to be like his, create your own. The overall feel to this wasnt bad, you had a couple of nice ideas but needed to word them better to give maximum effect when read. Style was pretty original, you kept switching it up though and thats what threw the flow slightly, more internals and multi's would of made it better than it is currently but it wasnt bad kid. .
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Old 07-26-03, 09:51 PM   #4
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I agree with everyone above...Some of yourl ines were forced and quite predictable...but the flow was aight....Ok vocab..So this was a nice lil piece...keep blessin..holla
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Old 07-27-03, 04:20 PM   #5
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good flow, i actually liked the sarcastic "be just like you" stuff. wordplay takes time, you'll get it and it will start to be more natural for ya. PEACE. please check out "Purified Needle" for me.
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Old 07-27-03, 05:17 PM   #6
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uppin
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Old 07-27-03, 05:36 PM   #7
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yea bro your lines were gettin there

but forcing it doesnt work

anyway

good shit elevate alot mroe and you got your self an ill head
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Old 07-29-03, 01:19 PM   #8
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thanks
keep uppin
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Old 07-29-03, 02:10 PM   #9
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i agree wit everyone above, form ya own style originality is tha key to formin a perfect emcee that and skill,keep elevatin~1~
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Old 07-29-03, 02:50 PM   #10
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Hey Boy,
You need to Elevate your peice. I know you got more than that in ya. Just Keep Spitting, I know you got it. Try Expanding Vocab. If Not Then Work on Wordplay Or Multi's. But I know you Got yo Own Style, Its Just, Its A Little OutDated. But I'll Look Forward To Seein Anymore Drops From You.
Keep Elevatin
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