replied to:
Change- Masta C ft. Deva and COM
Naive Thinkin'- Deva
Turn Back Time- Pot1ent ft. Chrit


verse 1:
it seemz like the longer ya live...the more you keep guessin'...
asking if life in itself is one big rhetorical question...
morbid obessionz with ignorin' depression...
just leadz to the thingz that I abhor turning more to transgression...
forlorned from the segments of meloncholy that have completed the puzzle...
I have not yet forseen all my strugglez but for every comment made I have a need for rebuttle...
to ease the pain...I smoke half a box of Newports in an hour...
to release the strain...saying how life is too short...I have no power...
I might have a peaceful rest when I push up flowerz in a grave site...
day and night I can't help but find myself victim to to an enslaved life...
I can't escape the hate or erase the pain from my sacred place of denial...
it seemz like the all of life'z questionz won't be answered until I meet the Grim Reaper face to face with a smile...
painz in my stomach...achin' from hunger cause I ain't eatin' right...
can't sleep at night in my streets with vice...when time is against me I'm gettin' beat in fights...
fuck life...don't make me repeat it twice...fuck all my friendz and family...
If I'm supposed express my feelingz how come noone can understand me??????
(hook 2x)

hook:
some make money...while otherz have to snatch ice...
I get high so I can't be stuck on rock bottom...now that's life...
the consequence of my actionz is yet to come but until then I act trife...
if you try to tell me all ya problemz then I'ma tell you "that's life..."

verse 2:
you can tell when you hit rock bottom when ya life is showered with gravel...
when you feel like an amputee stuck on the bottom of the tower of babble...
when you're devouring capsulez to release ya state of consciousness...
when you don't even get to perform ya actionz before you suffer the consequence...
me and life have a love/hate relationship cause we love to hate and hate to love one another...
the only light that found me was from an undercover when I couldn't run for cover...
I share the mentallity of many of my kind from the same slumz...
who believe that the only light at the end of the tunnel is when finally the train comez...
I used to doubt religion...I used to think that it was pretend...
when Christ returnz as a thief in the night I hope then he understandz the position I'm in...
until then...all I can do is pray as I stay awake in the night...
cause life is an endless battle but there'z no escapin' the fight...
(hook 2x)

uppin'...

I got you kid.
I checked this shit and it was filled with tight vocab. At times the flow didn't match up, but that can be flipped nice when done audio style (i'm just readin it as text though). Good questions posed and thoughts expressed, seemed you were spittin truth of some life struggles you've had. The one line that was simple but clever that caught my attention was:
"the only light that found me was from an undercover when I couldn't run for cover"//-King of Thievez
nice shit on that. i'm feelin that cause i've been dealin with that...!

Anyway back to it. At times this had a lil' bit of a poemy feel but at other times like that last line you brought fire. I like the differences between rap and poetry though it meshed ok. Overall a nice lil' drop here. Good shit....

PM me back and let me know wassup wit our battle and shit....

Hey! feedback on "Incidental Contact" in the song forum. 1

^^^aiiight man...thanks for the feed...I said in ya verse to me in the song forum...my mic broke on me...my dog sat on it and broke that shit...but I'ma try to get at the battle ASAP...and I'ma hit up ya track right now...

reall nice... reall deep...
I liked all the multies... it fit in nice in this peice...
your wordplay was good... here is my fav. line...

"when you're devouring capsulez to release ya state of consciousness...
when you don't even get to perform ya actionz before you suffer the consequence..."

you said that, I was like, dammmmmmmmmmnnnnn
nice line there, and the entire thing was illy yo... keep droppin...
~AshY~

Yeah i agree this was a real good piece....the flow was real nice i thought didnt really get off track at all....I to liked your multies they were real good....your vocab was real good as well, very nice....I liked the hook it was written well....overall i thought this was a good piece....keep at it and keep dropping.

thanks for da love y'all...stay up...