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Old 07-21-03, 07:39 AM   #1
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{B.R.E}”From A Distance”{B.R.E}

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From A Distance...


From A Distance, I Aim To Approach With Persistence...
She’s Doesn’t Even Realise My Existence, I Face Daily Resistance...
Against Ex’s, Who Don’t Agree With Insistence, I Dream Of Fairytale Romance...
My Heart Is In Relapse, Set Back, I Missed My Only Chance...
Just Cos I Don’t listen To Dance n’ Trance, She Doesn’t Even Give Me A Glance...
As My Heart Starts Emotionally To Advance, I’m As Brittle As Glass...
Maybe This Poem Will Be My Last, Your Effect On Me, I Know Our Love Is Impasse... (Impass)
My Durable Bones Are Aching, More Emotionally Insecure Hearts Your Breaking...
In My Boots I’m Shaking, I’m Awaiting For You TO Announce Your Current Forsaken...
So I Can Make My Anticipated Move, Then Your Heart n’ Tender Bones I’ll Readily Sooth...


(Hook) x2
To Her, I’m Non-Existent, To me She’s Distant, I’m Persistent ....... I’m Scared, To Approach, She Has My Eyes Notoriously Visually Impaired...



I Was Naive In Thinking, That You’d Ever Leave..
Deceive Everything, I Worked Monstrously To Achieve.
Your Character I Patiently Learned to Perceive, Believe Me...
When I Sat I Love You, Your As Beautiful n’ Gentle As A Dove....
Above The Rest, Is All The Distraction n’ Ignorance A Test...
Your Company I Look Forward To, With Eager Zest, Maybe I’m Just A Pest....
Like A Princess I’ll Never Treat You With Less, I Never endingly Tried...
But Our Personalities Just Collide, You Denied The Eminent Passion I Wanted To Provide...
For You, I’d Spread My Love Worldwide, Please Hurry And Decide....
Whether Or Not, You Want Me By Your Side, You have My Vocal Cords In A Knot...
I’m Like The Kid, That Emotion Forgot, When You Said “No” I Nearly Cried...
I Need You To Guide (me), I Need You To Love, Hold n’ Confide (in Me)...
For Your I’ve Been Constantly Denied As A Mc, I’ll Abide Your Dull Rules....
What If We’re Just Distant Fools, Am I Too Persistant, Or Just Non-Existant...


(Hook) x2
To Her, I’m Non-Existent, To me She’s Distant, I’m Persistent ....... I’m Scared, To Approach, She Has My Eyes Notoriously Visually Impaired...



Going To The Same Park Everyday, And Just Pray...
That If I Meet You, I’ll Have Something Intelligent To Say...
But Today My ‘Cords, Seem To Be On A Time Delay...
I’ve Studied Your Evolution Like Jean Baptiste Pierre Antoine de Monet….
(I’m Non-Existent)
My Rhyming May Be Inconsistent….
(To Her I’m Distant)
But To Your, My Love’ll Be 24/7 Consistent…
(I’m Persistent)
Your Affection, I Can Only Wish It….
(Word)
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(Hook) x2
To Her, I’m Non-Existent, To me She’s Distant, I’m Persistent ....... I’m Scared, To Approach, She Has My Eyes Notoriously Visually Impaired...
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Old 07-21-03, 03:34 PM   #2
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Uppin THis Piece!
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Old 07-21-03, 04:11 PM   #3
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good shit right here,feelin tha topic and itwas well expressed.
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Old 07-22-03, 07:11 AM   #4
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uppin'

Lotta Sleppin' ON THis Forum!
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Old 07-22-03, 10:56 AM   #5
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TH9IS WAS A PHENOM9INOL READ I ENJOYED EACH LINE WORD AND THOUGHT
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Old 07-22-03, 04:31 PM   #6
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Upin For Some More Feedback - Ty Word n'West!
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Old 07-22-03, 04:41 PM   #7
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This was some good work

Liking this

8/10

Holla
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Old 07-23-03, 07:30 AM   #8
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thanx....more in depth critisism?
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Old 07-24-03, 07:06 AM   #9
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Old 07-24-03, 08:07 AM   #10
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naw dawg you're definently not non existent shit man i hope you let her read that shit if that dosen't open her eyes then damn near nuthing will. I feel you most dudes should we've all had that chick who dissed us and we know we're better than the dude they get with
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Old 07-24-03, 10:58 AM   #11
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'To Her, I’m Non-Existent, To me She’s Distant, I’m Persistent ....... I’m Scared, To Approach, She Has My Eyes Notoriously Visually Impaired...'

Feelin' that shit dude... I can relate to what your goin' through in a way (you read my last post... you know...)

Decent wordplay... not your best... but decent... Good concept... Good wordplay... flows nice.... my favorite line is...

'My Durable Bones Are Aching, More Emotionally Insecure Hearts Your Breaking...
In My Boots I’m Shaking, I’m Awaiting For You TO Announce Your Current Forsaken...
So I Can Make My Anticipated Move, Then Your Heart n’ Tender Bones I’ll Readily Sooth...'

Keep bringin' that ill s$$t..
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