yo this is a beginnin of this song i dropin....beat is tight again when i get my mic workin i dropin it.........yo feedback wanted

haha i was just fuckin around tell me what ya'll think


by age ten, my parents was considerin//
puttin me on ridaline, sayin i was a demented kid//
but me and my pretend friend, didn't believe them//
so we went walkin round knockin on caskets sayin let us in!//
but thay didn't comprehend, so we went to tha insane asylem//
to talk to my uncle jim, kuz i could rely on him//
so i started ta convince jim, that my pretend friend was lost kin//
now where to begin, i'mma begin at tha startin//
other parents told myparents that i wasn't decent//
dunno why, but i wanted by 35 different police precints//
damn make that 36 last night was tha most recent//
7 felonies, tha other 29 well i dunno, thay kept secret//
see i rap like no other, wit a gat and some seran wrap//
always be straped, kuz i drivin around wit an ak in my lap//
don't care if i don't have ne bullets, i sling it at ur stockin cap//
ok i take it back, fuck tha gun, u'll get a drive by pimp smack//

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yo damn ya gotta kill someone ta get some feedback............


can i have feedback................................

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bleh...not feelin this...seemed too commercial...beginning bar was ok..everything else wasnt very appealing...

this was a good concept but the content was a little disapointing, if youd gone deeper into the mind of an insane person instead and trying to play a gangsta is would been a more effective piece.

add some multis and make your vocab a little more complex as well.

ya this is a lil keystyle, like i said begginin, i haven't went into it..i was just messin around wit it ya know....thanx for feedback

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hey yo i like that sig......thats tight......the verse was aight.....but some of the rhymes didnt connect to well....but im sure as an audio.........it would sound tight...

This drop was pretty ill...nice flowin.....I was a goos concept and you conformed to it...nice spittin...holla


P.S. How do I get that line above my sig to go away?