don,t read this rap it.
peep how smooth it can flow together.

grown up broke neva had time for fresh clothes,
it was always shell toes, over J's or prestos,
always rocked tha best flows,
but never rocked the wrist or chest golds,
rappers think they tight cuz that ice got they neck froz,
but only tha west knows,
that its hotter then hell but still it gets cold,
thats why u gotta carry more heat then the feds-hold,
fall from above and kill the streets like espestos,
u ant on my level ur watchin my right when im throwin left-blows,
i'm catchin ya off-gaurd,
hit ya rock-hard,
then left ya in the lot scared,
ya woke up and realized your not-hard,
i'm sendin mind waves that can stop-cars,
fuck up my mind in more ways then rock-stars,
best believe this ant shit i ant even spitten my hot-bars,
my real heat could even rock-mars.

Yea it flows aight

But you need to elivate, It seems like u got potential, use more metaphors and punches, and ryhme more words together instead of just at the end of each sentence.

nice topic tho, peace, peep my freestyle about Marijuana aight dog.

i'm sendin mind waves that can stop-cars,

~Nice Line There...Basic Rhyme Scheme Though~

~Not L.A's Finest But Alright From L.A~

~You Have Talent No Doubt Keep Elevating~

It was a nice piece........but it was hard to follow since i couldn't read it lol

^ You Illiterate?^

Rhyming/Flow
The Flow Was Killa Dawg,. You Spread It Out Nicely With Mad Multi's n' THe Bars Were Pretty Much The Same Length...8/10

Vocab/Wordplay
Improve On This. You Need To Expand Your KNowledge Of Vocabulary, Some People Say That Vocab Isn't Need, Thats O.k For Audio, But Not For Text..get me? Good Wordplay Too Dawg:"
i'm sendin mind waves that can stop-cars" .5/10

Concept/Topic
Hmm, Was O.k, I Prefare Story Topics More Or Once i Can Relate To, You KNow? 6/10

Overall
7/10, Expand Your Vocab, And Concept...But This Was O.k, Nuttin Special Though...

Word!

thanks yall uppin for feedback

LA's Finest........Eh..........Id unno bout that.........
Nice Multis though........You Had Some Wordplay Inthere....
Potential Is What You Have
Potential Is What You'll Use...haha

Keep Elevatin Like Crazy! Thats What I did

It was ok.. i have seen better shit from u but overall i was feeling it..

try to make it a little longer next time..