I'm back and better than ever, but wait.. I never left-/
So I'm just better than ever... but there's been no "ever" yet-/
so, fuck it, I'm just better, rippin raps that's h*ll a clever-/
and there's never, never ever been a better era yet-/
cuz I came to reign... call me a looming cumulus-/
I came to bring the pain to all the crews that's new to this-/
I WAS halfway insane till I mained the sane part of my brain-/
by eating lithium like candy canes, my God, this shit is ludicrous-/
I rip rhymes better than that nigga Juda Kiss-/
... or was it Jada Kiss? or Judas Priest? Shit, I need some sleep I'm feeling weak-/
and I think I'm on the brink of sinking in my own disease-/
but now I'm back and better... no, no, we already passed this shit-/
my head's spinning faster than an acrobatic chick in a back flip-/
I feel like i rapped dis shit smashed on acid hits on a massive trip-/
where one half of me's tied up while the other cracks a whip-/
Wait! I'm a pacifist for Jesus sake of Lazurus!-/
What's wrong with me? I thought I mastered this rappin shit-/
Aaaaaaah! What's happenin? this wasn't supposed to go this way-/
well, so they told me anyway, but who is THEY I'm so dismayed-/
It's like my brain got packaged up, then shipped and sent away-/
wait, that's not what I meant to say, but what I meant was n/a anyway-/
so fuck it, let me swallow these pills down before I take this chaser-/
ummm... I guess I'll get back to rappin a little later..

my ink pen races, then chases thoughts/
i think patiently, then send my phrases across/
like Lazar tip darts/
i hit bullseyes with haste an no pause/
creative artistically, no pages are lost/
thru mazes i walk/
lazy little bastard/
raised in these days when it pays to be a rapper/
on stage is what im after/
but im not captured in this craze/
nor incaged in the factor/
id rather have ta face disaster/
then play the role of an actor/
just to be commercially based an manufactured/
i vow to stay true to my ways/
for the rest of my days/
even when im aged an unattractive/
the fact is/
hip hop circulates thru my vains/
an thats it/
so ill work the trait till i change/
or move past it/
i want my words to be herd by the masses/
an alla the fashest political asses/
that act as if/
were all sado mastaicist/
hazardous/
to our selfs an any other that passes/
an that is/
exactly why/
i most not let opportunity pass me by............

SHOULD DID 2 SEPERATE POSTS BUT I WAS FEEING YOUR ISH I THOUGHT YOU SHOWED GREAT POTENTIAL AND A VARIETY OF SKILL STAY UP TWIN AND PEEP MY NEW ISH

the last few bars of the 2nd post seem real familiar..like i heard it before..mainstream rapper..but i dunno..dont really care..

anyways..

1st 1 - flow was nice..some nice lines..the begin n got a lil boring wit all the ever shit..but kinda creative at the same time..that would sound better in audio..not a bad post tho..what was the infasis on certain words for?..the capitalized words..

2nd 1 - flow was good..lines were real short tho..not a bad piece..flow made it nice..some ok lines in there..