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08-08-03, 04:19 AM
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Freestyle ...you vote
IP: D147 02D9
On the spot
My shit is hot Open your eyes, your shit is NOT// Just cuase i dont put these gay ass things in my rhyme (~ those things) Dont mean i wont beat you any give time// I feel another diss up on my head You act like a girl, "look what he said" I know you scared cause you flead// Mulit this, multi that, i'll write 100 different styles every day In every single way You read this, your like "is he gay?" "Oh my god, what did he just say?"// Keystyle shit on the spot aint hard for me Cuase im not a wannbee a fake mcee to fast to see// Yeah that was some weak ass shit... oh well..tell me waht ya thinks |
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08-08-03, 06:36 PM
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IP: E0C2 1797
Ya flow is fucked up in this shit, usually freestyles or keystyles are stronger in tha flow. You said some stupid shit in there that almost made me laugh, but that was just cuz tha fact that it was fucking stupid. Work on all areas of writing: flow, metas, punches, blah, blah. Don't know what else to say, this shit is like a 3/10.....no hate, just giving real critique.....keep writing and elevate.....
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