Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio |
08-11-03, 10:50 PM | #1 | ||||||
Guest
|
7-6-5 Full Song - Lemme know what yall think
IP: 3F2D 0690
this is some stuff that I layed down a couple days ago, lemme know what yall think
mic check..one..two... ima be spittin this for you you bein whoever is listenin come to the 7-6-5 where the parties rock and they last all night on my block rollin on 20s is how we ride the 5-0 see us and they hide cuz they cant touch us cant even catch us...might as well take the bus this is my town..n you best believe that i need no one to help me keepin' everyone on the lock down what i say goes ill be pimpin all deez ho's but there's a couple shorties that can roll wit me wit out em under my arm i might be inclined to cause some harm in the 7-6-5 we keepin it live the strongest always survive but thius is my town so dont clown now there are some cats that wanna rap but even the 6 years old think theyre crap so ima keep all this rap shit true you wont make it outta k town unless im dow wit you best believe ima keep it real every word i spit earnin me another 24 inch rim keepin these lights on dim so yall cant see you know you'll approach me askin to get on a track i went to high school wit you? really? thats cool ill tear you up on the mic havin all the girls like we're from the 7-6-5 in the 7-6-5 we keepin it live the strongest always survive but thius is my town so dont clown when yall see me on the strip hit me up cuz i got the 4-1-1 on where we go to have fun shit even the christian girls roll wit me cuz they know the ride is free for the parties we be leavin the city and rollin 20 miles thru the country out til 6 am and the party aint even gonna start til like 8 am cuz we gotta tear you apart we're not eva gonna get n e sleep rollin three deep in the '04 jeep listen to the poundin from the subs on those chromed out dubs we always roll around till night lookin for one last fight up in the 7-6-5 in the 7-6-5 we keepin it live the strongest always survive but thius is my town so dont clown |
||||||
08-12-03, 12:32 AM | #2 | |||||||
Guest
|
IP: 1B3B C284
This was the whackest piece of shit I've ever read in my life.
Why is there a mic check in a text drop? YOu have the gayest rhyme scheme ever... Quote:
LMMFAO.... quit while u haven't wasted anymore of your time... or mine you fuckin piece of shit. |
|||||||
08-12-03, 12:32 AM | #3 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: C1DA C961
hmmm..wow..where do i start?..1st of all..how long was the audio?..cause ya bars was real short..this was wack..in all honesty..im surprised i read the whole thing..flow was simple..real simple..no multis..and what were u talk n bout?.how old are u?..the take the bus line?..what was its purpose?..it didnt fit in..and made no sense..not a good way to rep ya area..id be ashamed if i lived in 765..cause be n completely honest..this was shitty..u got a lot of elevate n to do..
|
||||||
08-12-03, 12:45 AM | #4 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: 1B3B C284
Get Tupac out of your sig too, don't disrespect that man.
|
||||||
08-12-03, 12:51 AM | #5 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: 9B33 081B
this wasn't the greatest drop i like simplistic stuff but i agree that this is a little to simplistic. i would try to add some more visual words to bring out what you're saying keep dropping and elevating don't let anyone talk you outta what you love. 1
|
||||||
08-12-03, 05:00 PM | #6 | ||||||
Guest
|
IP: C725 DC3E
nigga please dat shit was tight i loved da flows da rhymes were off da hook, u r so so so so so fucking talented i dont know where to start.like when u said wit out da shorties under ya arm u might cause some harm. it so amazing how u didnt quite tell da reader that if u diddnt have da girls under ya arm u would fuck some guy in da ass, BRILLIANT!!!,an who can forget"we always roll around at night looking for one last fight"BRILLIANT how u told but didnt quite tell dat ya gay,i mean what type of guy rolls around wit girls looking for a fight? me being straight id be trying to get some pussy bo noooooooo not u , u wanna fight
hahahahahahahahahahaha ya fucking rhymes suckkkkkkkk to high HELL give up rapping an make money selling ya ass on da 7-6-5 |
||||||
08-12-03, 05:26 PM | #7 | |||||||
Banned: Spamming
|
IP: ABE5 FC72
You had a very basic rhyme pattern / structure, and the whole 'mic check' thing isnt needed in a text piece like this. The short bars threw the flow in my opinion, but if you recorded this in audio, i agree that it would sound a lot better. More mulkti's / internal rhyming / wordplay would help you a lot, but you just have to keep at it and read some of the more respected heads pieces here, then learn from how they write and such, you'll elevate in time.
Reply to my drop: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=72095
__________________
W o r d P e r f e c t ^This is your IP bitch! |
|||||||
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|