yo this is 5 barz i am gonna make this a collab and a song........ gimme feedback foreal


yo check this mic is like my fuckin outlet to tha world//
dude i treat my mic even better than my babygirl//

prolly a fault but foreal thou it's my occupation//
first time all alone, ready ta spit i was pationly waitin//

oh my god when i let loose and busted my spit that night//
i vowed always to satisfy, and never turn my back on tha mic//

dawg i don't let no muhfucka talk no shit at her, always got her back//
and yo it's a blessing, we got common interest we think of tha same exact raps//

i exchanged my vows to it and over and over renewin them//
by cuttin down these haters and spittin 10 barz to dem, and acceptin my win//

ain't no feeling when i with my mic, like tha world couldn't stop us//
like pac and his gun, damn watch gay-z try ta cop this//

sesions alone, shits crazy i explode and get pissed but she never complains//
she understands by amplifing my thoughts it'll bring da reign//

she had some friends so i got my boys thay very own baby//
never let my mic outta my sight, if i lost it i'd go crazy//

u would never understand tha feelings i get when i place my hands on her//
and when i go into 'oral intercoarse' she stands screamin no need for furniture//

at age 11 i found my soul mate that would be wit me for out my life//
and yo this is a spit to renew tha vows of devotion for me and my mic//

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yo....dope ass subject dawg....i got really into it.....i only had about 3 to 4 times were the flow was i LIL off.....but i dont know what beat u usin...and i know that if u readin with no beat....u cant get the flow.....

anyway...dope shit....i like this lin....----->

at age 11 i found my soul mate that would be wit me for out my life//
and yo this is a spit to renew tha vows of devotion for me and my mic//


damn....i hope ya wear condoms...!!! lol...

yo....chek my shit tho..."Cash Stripped"....peace....nice drop..!!

ayo feedback on this shit..........tell me what ya think......oh and its a hot ass beat, once i get my mic together i'mma drop it on soundclick......

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yo what ya'll think bout my verse.........

gimme some feedback.......

tell me what ya think.................

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[QUOTE]Originally posted by Raz
[B]yo this is 10 barz i am gonna make this a collab and a song........ gimme feedback foreal


YO MAN DOpe concept. flows nice

thanx kid........... ya i'mma drop it as an audio when i get my beats together be on tha look out............ more replies

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neone else gonna comment......

don't sleep.........


foreal uppin this thread.......

peep it

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it has been slept on but shouldnt be this was ill and well worth reading stay up

any more reply's damn, shit sucks when u get no feedback.....


why even post my shit if it getin slept on.......

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yo man tight shit right there...loved the meta the woman being like the mic, that was hot shit...liked the flow alot too, I was doin it to my own beat and all, I wanna here audio..

check my verse out please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=65540

nice son really original
its tight

Nice shit... flows a little off in some places, but for the most part it's pretty tight. Keep 'em comin'.

kewl spit man.. i wish i had skills to write somethin' like that dawg.. keep it up aight? peace..!!!

Thanx ya'll foreal.......means alot.........this started out as a lil freestyle but like i said it's gonna be an audio........so peep it when it finished........
More feed back ya'll don't sleep

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