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check dis out;
i feel pale when i stare into your bloodshot eyes theres a truth in your lies that u try to disguise when you get cut down to size, youll see just why i analyse these situations, tear them up in my rhymes. you pathetic and prosthetic, your fake as can be your face is out of place in this rung of society, i wont pretend to like something that i truly hate, i wanna tear you down again and then ill close this debate i cant wait, the time will come when the powerless have power, just wait and see, i garantee, in hell your soul'll be devoured youll get just just desserts, and im not talkin ice cream, throw your back against the wall like a lump of plastercine. and im gonna end this scene with my lyrical dream, the liftoff site, for our fight to change the way things seem, just to intense with burning passsion and the truest desire and all the weight of all the world will never put out this fire. woo! -stephanie |
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IM FEELING THIS NEEDS MINOR WORK BUT FOR THE MOST PART THIS WAS REAL ILL CAN T WAITE TO SEE MORE FROM YOU PEEP MINES
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yeh this was good, had a good flow, pretty good vocab,
keep droppin, lookin forward to seein more from you peace |
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yay! positive feedback!
(your cheques are in the mail guys!) ;-) |
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IP: 19AF 50C1
WNNA COLLAB
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IP: C1DA C961
This was a pretty solid drop... You're multis were onbviously the main draw on this piece... upping the flow and vocab might help youre pieces next time. Your opening 2 lines were what caught my eye and kept me reading.
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..Soft Focus..
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good start nerb...flow was iight word play was pretty good definitly a good start...be lookin forward to readin more of yah scripts...peace
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IP: 2723 D356
lacking meta and vocab
this would do better as a poem |
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
yeah gud idea word, collab
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