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all rules apply
due-date....tonight
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Were are you? i aint gonna drop and waist a verse when i can just dq you. chek in!............................................... ..................................

Check in.......Cry baby.............................................. .................................................. .................................................. ........................

lol, sorry. i thot u wasnt gonna show up till tom. let get this started........................................... ...................

You Lit~The~Fuse Now Ima Spit~It~Rude, &Don’t Even Get Nude
And I Swear I’m Not~Shittin~U But Seroulsy U got Ish-Shoes-Dude
My 'Hot Verse' Will Leave GAY-Z Trying To Rap Kids,Let Me State dis
Your Under Wack In the Yellow Pages, Plz Stop Trying To Blaze kid
U Cant Fuck My Rhymes,When Your Touched Than An Orgy Of High-Fives
Time~Flys, This Kid Rolled By My House And Try To Do Drive~Bye!!!
Beat You With My Left Fist’ And Have You Screamin That ‘Ain’t Right’!!!
I’m ‘Buggin Ya Dome’, But I Ain’t~Lice’, We’ll Call You ‘Dogs Vomit’ Cuz You Just Got ‘Ate~Twice’!!!

Line 2 ...His Sig......

Not bad for a keystyle waiting for him to put his verse down.............................................. .................................................. .........

My Rhymes Infest This Kid, Like Head-N-Shoulders on Lice
"...Its Not Worth The Risk", Kid...I Didn' Even Think Twice
Its MicDynaMic! What A Name..Ha! This Kid Cant Be Real
Had WritersBlocked and Let Me Guess, Thought It Over a HappyMeal?...
Your Lyrics Hold No Fortune, Like Asian Waiters With Empty "Tea" Kits...
Was Obvious Your "Herb", And That Aint No Chinese-Secret
Ill Leave U 2 Losses In Depth, Not Even A Battle Worth a Shot
......And Now Your Just 23 Wins From Everything Your Not....


...Period

For Dummies...
Line 2-Check the sig
Line 4-McDonalds, u know..McFlurry,McJr...u get it

Finnally Somebody i have some decent respect for he saw i had 8 lines so he deicded to use 8 lines not like 9 milacheater......................Peace good spit..

goodluck, uppin vote.............................................. .................................................. ..........

MicDynaMic - These punchlines were pretty much played through the whole battle verse. I wasn't feeling one bar that you had thrown in there, because to me, all of it was basic nonsense that I've heard recycled over and over again from other textcees, even when I FIRST got on the net or even off of the net, in person. "Gay-Z" right to "Find you under whack in the yellow pages." Please get more creative, because these two lines really murdered all chances that you had to get my vote.. Your multis weren't really hard, neither.. One or two bars had it, but overall, it just lacked majorly in that aspect which I do look forward to looking for in a battle verse or any other type of drop.. The structured format was decent, except for the last line which was very unbalanced from the other lines, just stood out, although it was your finisher, so you could look at it "standing out" for being so long a good thing, maybe? Overall, this was just not my "cup of tea," family..

My favorite bar that MicDynaMic used against H4iKU in his battle verse..

Honestly, nothing actually stood out to me that was at all good.


H4iKU - Decent battle verse, some of the lines were played, as well, but it was enough to take out your opponent, in my eyes.. I felt as if you could've came harder, although you took a look at the opponent's battle verse and thought otherwise from coming your complete best.. Maybe not? Maybe this IS your complete best, then I'd pity you, heh.. Your multis weren't onpoint, neither.. Lacked that aspect, as well as MicDynaMic did.. I think that you both need to elevate in that or your battle verse won't have any strength behind it and all it would have is punchlines, but nothing to make you anticipate the jab, feel me? Your structured format, however, was quite good, except one bar which was a little off, but it doesn't matter all too much.. It was a tie in the overall ratings, in my honest opinion.. Overall, okay verse, nothing at all close to being labeled "special."

My favorite bar that H4iKU used against MicDynaMic in his battle verse..

Ill Leave U 2 Losses In Depth, Not Even A Battle Worth a Shot
......And Now Your Just 23 Wins From Everything Your Not...."


Rating
Vocabulary - Tie
Multis - Tie
Complexity - Tie
Punchlines - H4iKU
Creativity/Originality - Tie
Structure/Format - Tie

Overall - Basically, all were tie, because in my eyes, all of the aspects that were used in this were boring from how you both used them.. Just not at all strengthed for your battle verse, nothing even remotely like that.. Work on improving your lyrics! -- Anyways, just remember that I don't try to be mean, nor rude, I just like to keep it brutally honest, real, and all in love, mos' definite..


Vote - H4iKU


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DAm!........lol. well, i kinda half assed it cuz i didnt know if it was gonna go down tonight. thanks for your long ass opinion. lol. 1-0 uppin

pretty much stole the show right there for me..
MicDyna Just His Whole Verse Seemed Like A Giant Filler..
Had No Real Point Or Hard-Hitting Punches.. Tried To
Hard To Flow Well...

Vote - H4iKu

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