my first open mic.

chorus:

dont hate on us, unless we hate on you
.. cuz since we came, we only say the truth
dont matter what haters say, or haters do
.. cuz either way, we still be stayin true

i come spillin these rhymes and feelin these lines
still in my prime, dont like it den deal with the times
still reelin from mine, bitch get some lines of ya own
cryin n moan, hope u get caught so try & get stoned
sinners try and atone ya women be cryin at home
just remember all it takes is bein true to yaself
geeks dont kill and poor kids aint do shit with wealth
bad for ya health; whos the last kid that cared bout iraq?
spit various tracks who the fuck cares bout malaria n crack
just bury all that, under whats true, the hurtful emotions
cuz what rappers ever not felt worrysome or lonesome....
so fuck you if you dont like this track i not worried now
no one really gives a fuck if you stand and mcs scurry, wow...
just wish it all would end and let the truth prevail
spit in new detail & keep tryin every route i fail
can i pay for food for sale enough to feed myself?
if i did this or that would i wanna say indeed i helped?
so i take a thought & weed it out.. figure out the ways i do &

dont hate on us, unless we hate on you
.. cuz since we came, we only say the truth
dont matter what haters say, or haters do
.. cuz either way, we still be stayin true

(continued with prophets verse once he posts)

Yo i liked this dawg! Saw it was yo first thought id check it out. I like the style i just dropped my first to. appreciate if youd check it out.

_then_

I can't sleep at night until I see the sun-in-the-skiez//
one-of-us-died in the heat of battle right in front-of-my-eyez//
his ghost-appeared-in-the-night but I chose-to-veer-from-the-light//
now I'm trapped-in-darkness gats strapped-in-harness clear-in-my-sight
when the smoke has cleared-from-my-pipe//
frozen-criez pupils are open-wide//
I thought of how you chose-to-die the moment I closed-my-eyez//
I pray that I meet-again with all my deceased-of-friendz but sometimez ask God "why'z he been chosen...WHY??????"//
all my emotionz lie...in the ground-and-grave-where-you-rest//
twin shots from twin Glocks were found-engraved-in-ya-chest//
cravingz-of-flesh ate my conscience cause the best moments in ya life will be saved-till-you-dead and life is only a prelude-to-death//

_now_

now I hustle...snatch pursez and snatch-chainz...
act-strange pack-flamez skinny nigga in the rap-game//
no holdin'-back on golden plaquez broken bats mean broken backs//
hold-ya-stash I'm smokin' hash I came from behind and stole-ya-cash//
I be the hottest-crook even my watch-was-took...
I advise you not-to-look...well whaddya know I got ya pocketbook...
try to get it back...I dare ya I ain't tryin' to scare ya into believin'-I'm-real//
fiend-for-my-billz look at me with an evil-eye-grill and I won't hesitate to see-you-guys-killed//
I ain't a killa though...but I do carry a knife-and-a-nine//
but only so I can claim possession of ya thingz and fight for what is rightfully-mine...

lol@ the last line.

dope man really dope.

Ive seen this topic done before many a time but this was decent, first verse came across doper in my opinion, the flow was its strongpoint, a couple of the multi's seemed forced here and there but its not that noticeable, content was good there - you got your opinions & views across nicely, stayed on point. .

King Of Thieves came ok, flow was there, multi's were all over the place in this scheme, the changing bar lengths threw me a little but all in all not a bad piece, & a good collab between you both!


Reply To Mine: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=77159

yeah...I can see how the changing bar lenth can throw you off...it's just hard to have even linez with my flow for some reason...cause I try to have internal rhyme scheme within the multiez...

^ Go Read "Burnt Bridges" At The Top Of This Forum - You'll See I Have Even Bars, Internals, Multi's, IMagery, Story Telling - Its Not That Hard Really, You'll Perfect It With Practice. . = )

I mean...it's not hard...but it was like 6 in da morning when we freestyled this up...that's why we had different topics...this is all off the dome...and at 6 am I just wanted to post it and not worry about bar length...y'all will figure it out if ya read it enough...lol...Enhance just told me to rhyme about life so that's what came to my mind...

nice drop both of yall i was really feelin yalls shit.....PROPS... UPPIN............................................. .................................................. ..................................................

thanks audible...still uppin' for feedback...

is anybody out there??????
if ya are...
we...
are...
still...
uppin'...
on...
this...
piece...

<-Sweet
Good job prolific yea i agree with james
hard to read when different lines n shit
Good luck 2 both of you on your next
collab->

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how you know I was Prolifik?????? damn...is it really that obvious??????

of course not i just listen to wut u post in king of dopeness tryouts ...............:\ wut u think people wouldnt find out?

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