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To look at one's self...
IP: E5B4 6C1D
i can not beat myself
i reach but no higher will my fingers touch tha stars for i have reached and felt tha tear of a God drip from tha heavens i have watched and pondered but no answer will penetrate my senses i move through, instead, into my soul but it is too dark to see thus...i walk blinfolded and hit my heart but it beats no more as i walk tha path imbedded in my mind tha shadows move and dart and they tear open my thoughts to reveal myself to myself i do not understand will you help me? i don't believe you will as i watch through my deep portals known as only "eyes" but my eyes are shut thus i turn around to walk straight back through tha veins until i reach my limit then i melt into myself and am once again... REBORN...
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uppin!
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your poetry is from the heart and I respect you for that. It's even easy for me to understand and to see from your point of view.
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uppin!! from some real peeps...
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Sharp Perfection.
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iight
i liked this here, it seems like something new, different then what ive seen you write before, but its nice. the flow was good, it kinda seems like one of those soul reading ones ( not quiet sure what its called ) your vocab fit the piece, didnt try to put in big words that didnt fit, they all went nicely the first line got me hooked it was a great opening line, and your ending was my favorite part, its not one that leaves you hanging like the door closed in front of your face, locked out from where you feel it should have gone my love ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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uh huh...ma man..this was nice...purely felt fa sho....ya flow was there...not a rhyme but a flow in words if you get my meaning...i liked the internal view of self...as ofcourse...self portreyed poems are among ma favorites...and this b one now....
word ma nig...you held it down.... i have watched and pondered but no answer will penetrate my senses i move through, instead, into my soul ^^as of course no words come from gods but from within...thats nice that you incorperated that into this... igido
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