Growin up I never got a chance to sit// ~ in one position, cuz every lil chance I dip//
From home to home strugglin with no chance of rent//
The last spent days ~ was wit no cash~no lint//
I'm broke mayn ~ landlords never seem to ease up//
The lease is up....now I gots to leave this~(fuck!)//
Now where I'm at? Wish it was cancuun//
Tell me how is a family of five to live in a house wit one room?//
And the bathroom, ya gotta go outside fo dat shit//
I lived da life ~ shit I've even been robbed fo da chips//
Never stacked clips, but ready to pull dat boi//
Shit don changed fo da better....now i can feel da joy//
Moved to the states to escape da reality what's makin//
Straight from da gutter, born and raised a Jamaican//

wow... i liked it alot
your imagery was good and i definetly saw what you saw through your eyes
i like the ending alot 2

few changes i would make if i were you..
add just a little more vocab to it..

thnx man uppin fo mo feedback

Yo, that shit was truth on paper and I felt that shit. Good spit and the ending sealed that shit tight. No huge vocab or anything, but not too necessary with this picture. Pretty damn good.

Keep droppin and hit up some of my shits in your freetime...

Laaate.

DAMn, shrt but sweet, i think ye cud'a elaveted it a lil more, but for a keystyle it was hot, i liked the picture it was truly from heart, i liked it, peace home boy

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thnx ya'll fo peepin

^^ Dope Keystyle.....

Really would like to hear you Freestyle.....
No need realy to rate vocab and shit.....Just a keystyle

Straight from the heart....
Overall- 8/10

NICE drop

props to those who peeped it

uppin

yeah son...this was hot...you was speakin' some realness up in this piece...but I would've liked you to expend a little more on the vocab...but the words you used will suffice...nice drop...the concept was good here...