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2nd time in tell me what ya think
IP: F718 7AAD
Big boys drive around with there big toys
Cadillac and Mercedes pimpin all da ladies With the slick paint job, and the underbody kit Most of these cars are more than legit With the flip down screens and the dvds Ps2 in the council,screen in da wheel Looking at the style makes these boys feel Mild beats emittin from the back Change the disc to a brand new track Pump up the volume and hear tha shit hittin People turning there heads and see me sitting In the seat of this truck with plently of mods Hear me open the throttle and hear you say ah With the dual flowmaster system and new glass packs New blue tach, that can reach one fifty Punch in the gas and watch me fly slickly Wit the North Star v8, common don't hate Engine chromed out, glass bead on the block Just can't leave a truck like this stock Able to lock up the front tries, let the rears spin White smoke pourin out ain't not a sin Pimpin this out will not even begin To much detail to blow your mind The interior leather, it's very devine Spending time planning, check this out No doubt this GM will be bout it Moneys no object when you have a dream Driving around and let the tires gleam You mean you just don't know Making this all custom is the way to go Front bumper push bar and conversion Learning that Cadillac is not hurting Just a growin truck in the world today Laying down a standard for you to try and top Because when i'm done you can't stop Something as cold that you can't pop With the M/T fat slicks on the rear 800 hoursepower is something to fear Near the end of the trend I can still depend That my sweet ass ride will bend da boundarys Me and my guys working at the foundary Castin and shaping a whole new body... |
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yea, yea, yea, it started off wierd 2 me. but then it got hot keep doin the damn thing. i liked
"New blue tach, that can reach one fifty Punch in the gas and watch me fly slickly Wit the North Star v8, common don't hate Engine chromed out, glass bead on the block Just can't leave a truck like this stock" this line was crazy |
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IP: F718 7AAD
aight, ok drop, tha wordplay played off of tha car/truck theme but was still basic none tha less, u also need to work on gettin some way to organize tha rhymes...
ur rhyme scheme was: A B C C D E E F F H H I J ... and wat not... jus keep droppin...
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IP: EBF7 21D3
Lmao At An Open Mic About A Guy And His Car. .
Nce original concept, ive never seen it done before! Flow was good throughout, it read nicely for me from start to finish, good structure to the verse, made it easy foir the reader to get into in my opinion, you stuck to the topic throughout, BUT a lot of the rhyming was basic, try using more Multi's and Internal Rhyming in your future pieces to add a little more complexity to your stuff, because ANY emcee can write a piece rhyming one-syllable words together, just look at Nelly, lol. Anyways, the potentials there, not a bad rhyme structure, decent flow, original concepts [ lol ], you just need to upp your wordplay / multi's / internal rhyming and possible takje a shot at doing a piece involving imagery and emotion - see how you do at those pieces because they are more difficult to pull off. Reply to my piece feat. abolish. Eace-Pay!
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