i came in here blindly....little off timing......but i keep the past behind me//
i've had too many darker days...now my ways....switch styles call a blade//
somedays i wonder why i spit...clenched these fists...yall say im nothig but a ball of shit//
but i got them wits...im creatively michevious...said im elementry huh, you on some preschoolshit//
you poiint fingers at me and you laugh...i don't think im better, just know i got more class//
but im constantly feelin the disrespect...on the net//
i give props where its due...i don't hate on you//
i don't wanna pitt party belive my yo...i got friends that are more distant then my foes...ya ain't know..///
i bet half these cats are full of shit...ain't ever really been threw shit...pull of "their RHYMES' off the net and shit...they ain't shit//
heres the lil story of the life i live...ain't ever been hit, i have kid//
two in the somach one on the navel...doc saidthank god, dunno how i saved you...the one that hit ya neck was really fatal//
so i got my second chance at life...get it right... im still doin grimmey but i make it right...im the light//
thesun, yeah thats what they call me...god gave it to me, call it a calling..//
keep it real yall no the deal...im strickly real...yall fabracated still//
so imma deateriate the health...do it in steal..ill can infect you if yous starilized yourself.//
if you don't follow then thats your fault...if you think im just bitchin you got it wrong//
this is the freestyle board so i spit...im going crazyinsane on some J&B(jayz and beyonce) shit...this i the way i spit...//
but just spit back i dont mind the knowledge...ifyou real then you real kid you get my homage(respect syn.)//

switch styles call a blade//
didnt make sence.....
other then that a lil simple but this was a very creative peace and showed a talent that can be uncovered.
you did real good as far as im concearned.....i will be looking for more from you

^^ beat me to it
that line is about a switchblade...it does make sense

the flow was kinda rough but it was there, the structure of your piece has to be worked on, try counting syllabuls per line... i heard it works

I like how this was an open mic introducing yourself... iv seen your battled on FL (all 26518258 of them) so i agree with word you will blow up soon enough.. just get that flow problem fixed and your good

dont sleep on this please (not a battle)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=80134

thanks man the love is nice constructive criticisim i can take but the you suck squit and you don't make sense if you hear me flow its lot tighter nit, as is with ne one, i got my battle records int he street not here, but im just tryin to create a buzz

no one said u suck or that u dont make since... word just didnt get that line...

*will edit this from now on*

no no man i didn't mean you heres other posts i put down ppl were only hatin not sayin ne thing positive really few ppl have and good lookin on that but you know oneday imma xplode and yall gonna be the reason i make it better so the just stand there with thier mouths wide open ya know so thanks for real man appriciate the comments i really do ONE

how hav u not got a deal u is ill

lol thanks but im not that ill .... everyone on HERE says they ripp me, if you HEARD my DELIVERY AND FLOW its different...but theres mad tight ness out here

ur doing good son keep focused

^^^yo man...how you a Harlem supastar when you stay in UK?????? I mean unless there'z another Harlem in England that i don't know about....but the only one I know of is in New York...