Same Old

However we enroll are words in our flow it seems to be identical
Always sceptical of whether i'm original but this is my credentials
Striving to reach my potential, My mentality is now facing calamity
Its harder than people know to be le git when spittin humanitys

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When i drop a piece thats part of me presented on the page
If i stopped growing in character then i'll nothing to convey
But just the same old same old peices would be displayed
Be swimming in troubles with sharks that want me delayed
Maybe i am? it's harder than all think too spit original jam
Stuck in trances like they were just lifes provisional exams
Why is it peeps who pull scams are the ones who living it up
Making small dents and false pretense got me tripping in ruts
Closing shut the earths surface cuz i'm rolling boldly tedious
Lifestyles decay from decades ago...how can we be ingenious?
When theres always a previous to what we originally create
End up with symmetry ways but what i crave is my ministrys fait
Our chemistry dates back to centuries ago so yes are styles old
Unless we evolve into the judge so the trials are put on hold
Then scald the finals so are lives aren't stopping and starting
End up being the game and insisting on cropping the bartering
Stopping the bargaining with decisions that are crucial to ways
This is the usual way its played but too overcome that and stay
Within the Game...

Same Old

Blah! same old shit elevate man

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Nah i was jokin


Nice drop, ...the message u was pointin out, came over clearly, the vocab u used was avarage, ...not realy outstandin , but nice, ....the flow was there ....i never missed it ....plus i speccially liked these 2 lines

Our chemistry dates back to centuries ago so yes are styles old
Unless we evolve into the judge so the trials are put on hold

Real nice drop , props to u Pz

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that was hot i liked that shit where you said Our chemistry dates back to centuries ago so yes are styles old
Unless we evolve into the judge so the trials are put on hold that part was hot good drop

i liked that shhit man...ver ygood piece consistency a good flow to it and good message ........overall ..dope

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thanx y'all

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Dope . .

Cam Said You And Me Will Be The Next Generation Of Legends . . .

So What Do You Say . . A Collab Possibly?

Pm Me Your Aim or Something Like That . . .

Good Work . .

Crazy Shit, Everything about this is Crazy. A Dope drop, you had the multis, vocab, and the rhyme scheme. But you could use a little work on the whole thing.

Somtimes you had misplaced words, but it's all good, I kind of made it out to understand it, so its definetly tight. Your idea is tight too dawg.

Respect, Good Job.

Yeah, ive tried teaching the both of you gradually, reviewing each of your pieces, saying how to improve then telling you if you had and what to improve on next, you two are both the next generation of good topical heads here at RB, i can see it now.

Onto the piece. .
not really a lot i could fault here, a few lines were like, one syllable out, e.g:
Striving to reach my potential, My mentality is now facing calamity
Its harder than people know to be legit when spittin humanitys

lose the 'is' in the first line, and add 'im' in the second, it'll perfect the flow syllable wise, at the moment its like.. one syllable out, but its easuily fixed, look. .
Striving to reach my potential, My mentality's now facing calamity
Its harder than people know to be legit when im spittin humanitys

see how that flows a little better? its nothing major, but it would help the piece a lot. .
the latter verse became more dope, stuck to the topic nicelt, some good multi'd usage, i saw you had internals, but they were basic like, one word rhyming for the most part, try to make the internals multi's as well, that'll improve your stuff ten fold, all in all, good content, a nice written, made for a decent read, your getting there my man.

Props!

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