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09-22-03, 06:53 PM
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I-s-o-l
IP: 6FA7 7304
on the tip of my tounge
words balance on threads awaiting a time to jump. Suicidal cries shed a tear, as it rips reality to shreds. Skies tourn, grounds shaken people die, and heaven awakens. a devils nightmare in the makin' as he see's his souls are taken. he rots alone in a sweltering hell. the rest of the demons are baking. anger fills him with 1000 shivers as he sits erect just shaking. pointing the finger at jesus with blame trying to fill him with evil shame crossed him over and won the game picture perfect world, ripped from the frame. and lit with the closest hell raging flame as it burns in satan's spawn's name I...S...O...L... evil glares in the eye of the storm as the flames of the name grow warm. a new evil has just been born. and as he speaks... reality's torn. on the tip of my tounge words balance on threads awaiting a time to jump. Suicidal cries shed a tear, as it rips reality to shreds. |
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09-22-03, 10:32 PM
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IP: 6FA7 7304
no replies?
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09-23-03, 02:04 AM
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IP: 9B33 081B
very spiritual interesting way of writing it.......i'm not quite sure if i got the entire message but this seemed to me like a picture of what is to come....kinda like reading the book of revelations...if it were written through your eyes....i didn't get it fully but i did like it keep doing ya thang
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09-23-03, 03:04 PM
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IP: 6FA7 7304
thanks. any more?
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09-23-03, 04:43 PM
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Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
iight
this caught my eye when i first jumped throu it, coz i have a thing for circular poems ( start and end the same ) i dunno why i just do, maybe its the fact that most things you look at can be related some how to a circle, most forms, even life and earth itself. and me im a big belive of reincarnation so maybe coz of that too....anywho ive gotten off track this piece as said before i dont either think i understand it entirly, but its a simple written piece, and one that leaves alot to be filled out by the reader, so it can comes off different to just about everyone. my fave 2 lines: Skies tourn, grounds shaken people die, and heaven awakens. i found i had to read it over in someplaces, coz i wasnt really feeling the flow all that well, but thats about it ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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