another sacrificial lamb!
befailed to the frail ways of man.
let freedom be gained with the flames and dethrone of the vatican.

MAN can never understand.
thats why im MEAKENG KNOW CENTZ-
until the seven seal is broke my enemies will never repeant.

no one is exzempt-once i rise the temp.
i'll alter your pigment-by element.

black as tar-black as the matter that surounds the stars.

For those that rock like cement,
and aint even decent.

my flows is volacanic magma exploding from my mucas-
traveling where no man has before in metaphors like GEORGE LUCAS.

see i know the truth-its evident in my content document proof.

people hate reality-so im the god fighting allah in my aracana of enemies.

who wish to battle me?
sacrifice myself like jesus.I cant believe this,
how the mind can be so meak-

CARNAL is the basis, for CARNAGE basics, so i use "carnal knowledge" to murder the weak.

I AM UNIQUE-
but if the world excepted my thought your normal brain waves would be obsolete.

is it dicieven?
or does it seam A&R and fans are demons-feeding from the bleedin of heevens?

that seams to be the case-
since i pour my heart and my soul into my faith-
into a collection plate.

hoping my future will survive with me.
In all actuality thats just me paying god praying with bribery.

THE GIFT OF LIFE IS MINE,so i use the dominion over myself-
to blast spells-
and CAST rappers for the MOVIE intitled "MY BIBLE",
persecute them then see them in HELL.

donate my path to acurate math.
but not everything adds up-

cause if my dreams were subtract from fact.
id be another bumb with a dime cup.
or a foolish prisoner doing time to re~up.

i know its fucked up.
but there's so much beaf to eat-
i fast at times for atleast a week-and honor those i defeat-
those that i beat.

those who challenge my authenticity-just cause my name isnt spoken with theirs and i lack publicity.

im an infermecial for rap your just commercial crap that's all you'll ever be. im something your not the definition your the word for M.C..

educate my brain to sustain thought capabilities your not copadible for.
the ability to make words hurt you, gain territorial victory with my editorial cold war.

uppin

to be honest man, this was a hard piece to read dawg.

Your flow was nice... you had that on point, but your vocab and your rhymecheme just shot off... your topic kinda fell off point, but your creativity took that up... you had a coupl omultis in there, and they were nice when you used em, i'd tell ya to work on those some more...

Work on it alil man...

That was poetic, man. Very profound. I was feeling those lines that I quoted the most. You were using complex expression but you touched upon some heavy subjects. It was anything but simple. I liked it. Keep it up. One+

THANK YOU BOTH FOR CRITIQUING HONEST I WILL MAKE SOME EDITS TO MORE SIMPLIFY WHAT I WROTE

dawg im sooooo sorry
just drop our collab...im a loser who cant rap

ohh yea... this was good... flow was kinda hard to find but ther... vocab there but could be upped... overall one of your best that i have seen

my bad with the collab...

realist pm me we can just do another instead dont down yourself you got talent...
also what was wrong witht he vocab i have to ask?
i did this listenen to visions of ghandi from JEDI MIND TRICKS i thought i fdallowed the rhyme pattern maybe its back to the drawing boards for me.

uppin

I thought this was pretty good, very creative, unique structure and rhyming. This was nice to read, cus there were enough rhymes to still carry a flow, you had some sick lines in there. Tight verse.

thanks pop but i sence you didnt like something tell me