short an sweet lol....feed back

I rule, similer to the sun i burn who ever may come
in my path as soon as they reach for the bloody gun
i'll crush the rush an bust the bullet an send you to god
all for remorce of a sort of weather in my lifes unweary fog
i feel lost, but still i rule my life wit a passion of hate
love was a mistake it was equal to the devils earthquake
so simple to seperate mad an peace no matter the heat
i'll take the energy beneath my feet an stay stable on concrete
itational basket case wit a handicap brain..physically insaine
rulen my crutch on my knees to the lord like what's up
in life im crazy an done the evil but still havent had enough
i wont give my life to a casket i rule the wrench i turn the rachet
no matter how tight the screw i'll pull through an you life flash it
im'a crazy mother fucker reachin for what im striven to be
a killer in me stingin everything like a bumble bee..r-u-l-e
imortaly unfree but still leathal like mel gibson..cant get none
im'a train you better get off my track or get ready to run son
the only beggoton son feels the pain an spashes in the rain
but in life i aint playen i rule my life...it aint a fuckin game

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

This was pretty simple, you were on point up to the last 4 lines, they were played bruva, the leathel an mel gibson thing has been said TOOOO many times, but other than that i can't critisize.
nice piece bruv
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