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Old 09-25-03, 10:44 PM   #1
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i can't even see the sunshine,
so fuck this. . .
i'm at home lonely like mops without buckets
don't you love it?
like leavin' me dead
you did love it. didn't you?
isn't that what you said?
that night on your bed,
forget it, at least try to
i felt my rage build inside him,
while he was inside you
sometimes i open what
could have been eyes,
reminiscin that night i swam
to the pool of demise,
happiness was in my thoughts
thoughts i had were all glee
so i met a lonely chicken
scrambled her eggs, and made me.
one man and a lady to make
one that wasn't either
unborn and unwanted
almost like oven freezers
fuck the believers, fuck the free ones
fuck the depressed suicidal drama queens
they should be happy that they
were a seed mommy did leave. . .
fuck them. fuck anti depressents
you want an anti depressant? try
never having a chance. . .bitches
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Old 09-25-03, 10:47 PM   #2
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i liked this very much
the flow was off at times but still not too bad
the vocab was greatly used... a sprinkle here and there did good
the topic was understandable by the comman person which is good

overall great job

if you would be so kind (all being slept on... please choose at least 1)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81616
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81183
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81665
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Old 09-25-03, 11:13 PM   #3
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"fuck the depressed suicidal drama queens
they should be happy that they
were a seed mommy did leave. . .
fuck them. fuck anti depressents
you want an anti depressant? try
never having a chance. . .bitches"



Sand when it comes to writing your a god. If you stop writing I'm going to chase your ass down and staple a fucking pen in your hand!

Always dope Sand.
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Old 09-25-03, 11:31 PM   #4
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I have nothing to say.
You write like I want to write.
you mak me feel inadequate and small, and make me realize that multies and rhyme scheme are not what matters.
thank you very much Sand.
Peace
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Old 09-26-03, 02:46 AM   #5
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^so very true...


one of the few reasons i still occupy the Open Mic section is infact Sand. extravagant peace, but still short.. you leave me wanting more and awaiting the next drop.
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Old 09-26-03, 09:55 AM   #6
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Sand, thank you. This does mean a lot to me. Truly. Thank you. Your truly a great man.

I'm writing this on my wall. I do it with every piece, phrase, saying, etc. that touches me deeply.

Thank you.
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Old 09-26-03, 11:57 AM   #7
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Yo That Shit was SOOOO nice

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that was one of the nicest things ive ever read, i felt the flow in my head a little interrupted at times but i felt the idea develop. VERY NICE
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