http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8627#post798627
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...9715#post799715
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82007
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...0817#post800817
i am not lazy with the replies there are about 5 threads i forgot to mention there

Teacher: Hey kids today we have a guest speaker. he will be telling you important facts about life you wanna remember.
Muhahahaha
First of all hold your curious questions, while i'm delivering furious agression,
With my mysterious message, i see a few in here stressing, today this lesson,
I'd like to teach you children, how to scam the goverment to make millions,
How to blow up a building, and collect the insurance i'm quite sure when,
I leave you with some knowledge u'll go out work some minds not frolic,
But i give you no promise, cause i got another death doom accomplise,
who tries to accomplish, his goals by telling you kids whats evil is wrong,
i'm popular being played backwards on every song, i attack cowards strong,
with the grief preaching mind state, i recline hate to decline rates at
pro line gates, with no mind state, and i'll go find dates, so when the time
is right my mind is tight with a miming pipe, so you can see my actions with
out counter fragments, i'll amount to fractions, in this whole counting backspring,
in the counter clock wise forward motion, with a corrosive motive with explosives
chosen your ex hos been frozen, with that heart less thinking system wisdom i'll tell
you the real oz wizard's been risen, with a blizzard thats missing, the perfect storm floats
on shallow waters, covering battle choppers, so i'll saddle proper, with an eye dropper,
so i will not spill the unholy liquid, tell you a secrect, the truth is out there but when
you seek it, be sure to wear your leaking home beaken, so when the siren's screehing,
you can hear my low keys preaching, with silent mouth movements i'll be speaking...

Any questions? yes sir your scaring my friends,
well little billy i'm here in despense, so i'll scare
n pretend, but i'm only 7 years old muhahaha
thats nice now u'll see the next 11 years unfold,
oh whats this smoking injecting/wishing/bitching layin cold,
[/b] *crying* no thats horrible, the turth isnt being told[/b]
Any questions? muhahahaha mumumuhahahahahahahah

Teacher: leave my class room you horrible man!!
Not until you know my un fallable plan, with a dissolvable damn,
My applausable hand, is gunna cause you all to get damned,
Make santa claus drive through tough sand, with a sledge hammer,
flashing a marketing scheme pledge camera, with the edge stamina,
of a trend calibur, that will damage the calender so every
December, seems like the annual tradition becoming my
negative manual patition, for a substancial position in this mantle
supervision, supersition vison blizzard with a charazard pokemon
evolution where the prostitution is like taking candy from the childish mindless
goverment constitution, with my permament contribution to disfigure this
conned tuition condition of the mental expedition, i take to set my mind
straight from the sky rate pilot, cerish and repect who i listen to so i'll
exploit and pirate, muhahaha the story will never finish with my endless chapter
as i continue my evil grim face image laughter with my ill age pillage
cracka's, i'll attack the windows to break out the soft jacker, so here's the
suprise you will all face a horrible death with a nice cup of "SHUT THE FUCK UP",
being outta LUCK SUCKS, muhahaha muhahaha muhahahah muhahaha
Teacher: Children shiled your eyes, clog your ears, i cant belive the lies, the end is near,
Mr Evil: Any questions?
Lil Billy: So when can we get revenge of that counter discounted ill mounted santa causeless?
Mr Evill: Excellent my young fiended friend now for ever u'll be accompanied with applauses.

pretty good my man
liked the concept of it all
flow was very good as usual...some multies etc
the story was interesting and the use of vocab and the way it fl;owed kept the whole thing interesting even though it was a long read
good little twist at the end

opening verses were good as well...how u were telling the kids how to extort money n shit
overall one of the better pieces ive read from you
props

pretty good piece..it had a good story line to it..some parts i felt to find hard to fin the rhyming scheme...but it made up for it for the story theme..it was a good read..an eminem "hi my name is" type of vibe i got...decent though..keep it up lates

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thnx for the replys...............but RULE 1 thing

was a good read..an eminem "hi my name is" type of vibe i got
what teh fuck..............................are u a fuckin herb or what

excellent flow...but it seemed at some points you were focused so much on flow that you didnt stop to think weather you should actually put the newt few words in..regardless, the concept was original and enticing..the fact that you werent talking about 'Fuck Him/Im Hard/Im Hood/I Miss You" was a breathe of fresh air..good drop

This was a pretty good peice, it was a good read too i thought, your flow was good, it was a good concept, and your content was pretty good also, overall it was a good peice, keep dropping.

Note Dezyir's Sarcasm. .

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notice u not fuckin even replying u fuckin homo...i'm gunna report ur ass LOL

trip..thanx for the feedback kid... and Masta C already gave you some ^^

this was funny.. yet kinda disturbing at the same time
flow was so/so at some points.. vocab was very well used but could have had a few more

good drop kid.. thanx for feedback
for those who dont know
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82007

thnx for the reply

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seen the links on top.........well gives me the right to UPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP THISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS BITCCCCCCCCCCHHHHHHHHHHHH

i thought the post was good in my opinion. the flow fell off at some parts durin the song. the vocab and wordplay were pretty good, i liked the content and topic thought. ur structure was fine, and overall id say it was a 7-7.5/10. good post man.

peace.....

wtf???????????^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

with a quote like this i wouldnt be talkin
"You thinkin lifes a joke, Ill slice your throat/ Oh, u a thug, u about to get yo rights revoked/ Im from the Dirty, we dont even know the price of soap/ Im a star, look in the sky, u need a microscope/ im way ahead of the game, thuggin runs in my veins/ my pockets chubby, so i went and got a gun in my name/ its just me, him and my blunt in the range/ a young ni*** with a filty slang/ ha ha, i hop out like a Jack In The Box/ with three macks and a glock/ im askin for nothin, im snatchin my props/ im gettin money while im laughin at cops/ it aint ya lad, i aint bad/ its the Devil, why dont u tell him to stop
-Fred(Da Band's 'Why')"

i give u a compliment, then u diss me, good way to get people to like u. i was feelin that verse when i first heard it on the bad boys 2 soundtrack but if it bothers u that much, i suppose i can change it.

peace.....