Blas harder than the average she toppin' the billz..../Talkin' shit solid as "Rocs" ain't even coppin' "A mil"..../Fake catz they ain't able, for show like designer labels../They ain't real they come in digital like DSL cablez.../I'm rugged and hardcore past the Bones and Marrowz.../Surrendered quick, I ain't even have to tote the barrels../This chick ain't for the ballads, fuck the sonnets and carrols.../Watchin' out for stool pigeons keep the eyez on sparrowz../Only Midwest feel me when I point my arrows../ Takin' out all the bitches that's mo' "Chicken" than Harold'z.../All the drama that you carry ain't the reason you signed../Respect my Gangsta...Naw, nigga respect the RHYME...

Blas: These Niggas stay crooked like a quarter to nine.../ I shoulda declined, made it short and harder to find../I live for the grime, the grind, blank faces and cases.../Takin' no shorts, no losses on an everyday basis.../
Keep it in the air like them wide open spaces../Impatient run the groove when u chop the floor pacin'.../ Wastin'...important information, I'm sayin'....Where u gonna be when the music stop playin'??




*Sorry so short, I'm in class.....

I gotta up this
^^^^^UPPIn'

bah?!?!?!?! WTF??!?!?! was that
u need to put your sentecnes
into line form, not just write
paragraphs, you had good flow
some wordplay, but next time
spit on a topic, not jut random
gangsta shit, and no do not base
the topic around you, i mean this
really had no reasong or meaning
behind it, it was just simple randomness
that you typed ou in probably
10 - 20 mins, please next time
a topic is really nesseccery for
OM's bah just eilivate, u got flow
all u need is direction and guidance
to the right way..............................



return the favor with some funky flavor
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82195

Okay...I honor that, I was bored a hell and needed something to do..didn't really thought I had a topic though(WTF"Gangsta Shit"??). And for the record, I typed this in more like 5-10 minutes so u know I was bullshittin'.

^^triplicity its to bad ur not givin the direction and guidance u suggest, aight dude, ima say u need to change ur structure somewhere close to this:

xxxxxxxxR, xxxxxxxR
xxxxxxxxR, xxxxxxxR
-or-
RxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxR
RxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxR
wit R bein the rhymin word
im also gonna say u need to pick a topic that u can write somethin deep, and interestin about, but im not gonna get on u to much bout that cause thats what i did on my first two post, so whatever. besides that the wordplay was ok, the vocab was pretty good, u show potential, just keep workin at it.

yo if u have the time can u hit up my post?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82558
thanx

peace.....