When i look back i cant help but hate him,
Even though its been more than 6 years.
I've been through so much since he left me,
And yet, no experience can cloud my visions of him.
He's got the effects of a drug, i'm addicted,
Hooked on my own foul desires,
That for one night of my troublesome life,
I can escape from the worlds cruel satires,
And melt into the everlasting fires that are his eyes once again.
And remember what it is to be loved.
For 6 years my bed has been empty, my life a pale palette of grey.
My heart like a broken toy in the closet, never to be played with again,
My mind is a shrine to his memory and my soul is not mine any longer,
But searches for its other half in the dead of the night, so we can come together, be stronger.
Like siamese twins we are joined at the heart, yet connected by such a thin twine,
I miss greatly the days spent making love to him, 6 years ago, when he was mine.
In the intense mist of our passion, we often got carried away;
We had rows, we fell out, constant quarrels, but we always made up the next day.
The sound of his voice, the feel of his skin as we cuddled close under the sky,
How i loved him, and yet...how i hate him, even more so as time passes by.
For clocks do not heal as people will have you believe,
In fact the words have decieved me.
All he said became a lie, when he swore that he would never leave me.
And even though it wasn't his fault, i cant stop from hating him still.
I didnt see 'meaningless life' left to me when he inked my name on the will.
He has left me with nothing, i'm suicidal, because i survived.
And this goes out to everyone who can relate, who had a loved one .........that DIED.

r.i.p to all the dead loved ones i've lost, this goes out to all y'all.
People give me your feed on this one, possibly the longest poem i've posted on rapbattles.

PLEASE REPLY.......PRETTY PLEASE?

Those lines right there shined the most you a good writer just shorten ya bars a lil so the flow wont be so choppy nice job though keep it coming 1..

hey thanx for the feed, i'll try to improve next time. Please people give me sum feed on this poem, its kinda easy to relate to i think.

Yes a nice poem
a very enjoyable read,
The imagery was my favorite element of this poem,
i saw alot of colors and objects and they linked into each other,

I had no trouble with the bar length, it was fine

Pz.
(plz reply to my piece 'Calculate the Risk' Pretty plz...)

everything in this poem fit together. No flaws. I felt your emtion and at times were able to pitcher what you were thinking. wit all respect

thanx y'all and addlibb sure i'll check yours out. JT luv ya always. keep feedin me y'all
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very strong peice and i can tell that YOU WILL NEVER forget him.

thats the feeling i get the man is forver emblazoned in your mind.....

a hug for the pain you felt

was very beautiful

hey thanx Hazy B, you been through something like this? well either way, you certainly hit on how i was feeling when i wrote this. Much Respect.


reply peepz

Hey Girl..
This was an amazing piece, Great imagery, and incredible transfer of emotions..very well written..At the beginning I thought he "left you" in a broke up with you kind of sense..I like how you didn't let the reader know he had died until the very end, cuz it makes it that much more impactful..seriously, I felt something wierd deep inside me when I read that last line.
Very Sad..I feel for you..I can only imagine what it would be like to lose someone like that.....
Be strong and keep on keepin' on, girl.
Beautiful poem.
Pz.