People reminice about the good ol' times,
Wishin life was like a remote, wit a touch of rewind,
The energetic souls and cuckles of the prime,
Now takin on jobs...leavin the rest behind,
Everything seemed graceful, nothin serious to worry about,
The parents supported the loop, always able to get out,
The hangouts...movies, dance clubs n schools,
Ya might say ya hated it...bu that's where ya grew,
Meetin friends each day you showed your presence,
The non-stop partyin on each vacation,
The girls dressed persicely to perfection,
Sittin in the last row...scopin out the glory,
I hope you cherished those times...but fo me it's a different story...

(2x)
My prime, Things rarely go right
My prime, Beggin ma' ta let me stay home tonight
My prime, Endless days of doin wrong
My prime, fatha pushin my ass to move on

Sometimes i wonder... If i'ma get the boot too,
Witness my brotha travis leave, n greg n renee left soon,
Simple things happened, just some kids doin the ordinary,
Ya they were caught.. smokin weed by the cemtary,
They arrived home... Ma' didn't take long to have they bags ready,
She left them select few items to survive January
The bitter cold almost killed my brother,
I hate the bitch fo that, My mother...Shit no longer,
She just provides the roof ova my head to stay under,
Food on my plate..I'd like to shove up her ass,
Take a shit on her after i pop an exlax,
Parents split... they started to fight over me,
Custody, what the hell was that... i was just a pre-teen,
Obscene you see, we never had a family dinner,
Mom just worries about herself... my step dad a worthless drinker,
Am i gon' float or sink... best believe i'm a motha fuckin sinker,

(2x)
My prime, Things rarely go right
My prime, Beggin ma' ta let me stay home tonight
My prime, Endless days of doin wrong
My prime, fatha pushin my ass to move on

NOTHING IS RIGHT, I HOPE MY ASS DIES SOON,
IF I REACH 17 IT'LL BE ON THE 5TH FLOOR'S ROOMS,
CALL ME FUCKIN CRAZY, YOU HAVEN'T WITNESSED NOTHING,
IF I SAY I WOULDN'T KILL FAMILY... I'D BE BLUFFING,
IN A CONCLUSION TO THIS, I'LL JUST RECIEVE SOME "FUCK YOUS"
FUCK ME BITCH? JUST LIKE DAD FUCKED ME OVER TOO?
FUCK EVERYTHING, WAIT...I HAVE FUCKING WHAT?
OTHER THAN THE FUCKIN BUTTERFLIES I'M BOUT TO THROW UP,
FUCK MY LIFE... FUCK THE CHILLY BREEZE,
FUCK MY FUTURE, THE FUCKIN I'M ONLY 15,
FUCK THESE TEERS FALLIN DOWN MY CHEEK,
AIN'T FUCKIN NOBODY FEEL SORRY FOR ME,
I'D BE FUCKIN SUPRISED IF MY GIRL N FRIENDS WOULD STAND BY ME,
THE FUCKIN INK DRIPPIN...LIKE THE BLOOD FROM MY ARTERIES,
IF YOU KIDS WANT MO INFO..."PLEASE TURN TO PAGE 3"
MOM TOLD THE NEWSPAPER I WASN'T WORRY FOR THE OBITUARY,
THE FUCKIN I'M CURSIN BOUT, MY LIFE IS DONE,
DON'T THIS HAPPEN TO YOU MAN, DON'T LET MY HERITAGE PASS ON







what ya think....yea... nothin fancy... just strait up
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believe it.. it's true shit that happened

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This peice was pretty good i thought, it was a good read as well, your chorus was pretty good also, your vocab was good, multies were ok, your structure was pretty good too, overall id say it was a good peice, keep dropping, and if you get the chance check out one of my peices, Much Appreciated, Thanks.

wow....someone needs to switch to de-caff... got a little too crazy there towards the end..


heart-felt, flow was nice, content was good, where you lacked in multis and metas you made up for in pure emotion.

dcent drop my man.

uppin

Deep shit,no doubt.You've got emotional in ya kid,i can tell.....keep dropping your elavating...
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