They want sex from us...and if they dont get it...they take it anyway,
They can do that, and yet why can't we?
This world is one of unequality/
Women on the streets struggling to get by, in the slums, cradling babies.
God give man the power to crush us in the palm of his hand,
To rip up our hearts into pieces and blow them away into the wind,
They have a strict control over us, we have no voice, we will always be second best.
Always be behind them, considered inferior in every way,
They can impregnate us, then toss us out in the cold nine months down the line,
When they get sick, we are treat like dogs, at our masters beck and call.
They are sronger than us, or so were made to think,
No wonder rape is so low on the agenda these days,
Why would anyone care about women?
They can steal the one thing sacred to us, our virginity,
And once its gone its gone forever, dead.
They can scar us for life because of their sick pleasures.
Men......
Bastarding men...........


i do understand that all men aren't bastards, thats not the point...i know a few i could mention that are worthy of that title. This is about all the bad ones, who treat women like shit, the poem had no rhyme scheme, it was basically how i feel and quotes put together in such a way that hopefully it makes a few people think.

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BITCH lol...just kidding...good piece there girl...i think you had good emotion but you could elavate a little more..try an re-read an think what makes you vibe..na'mean? but yo good drop just try to hit the pad with something you feel stoked about it'll help you imagine mor lines for it an critique the piece

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They want sex from us...and if they dont get it...they take it anyway

this is strong

and the rest of your peice followed throgh with waht it was you were trying to accomplish but i belive you caterogized many things into one and perhaps that wasnt the right thing to do if i were a loving man and had a wonderful gurl or wifey i would be offeneded by this but since im a chick i take the BIAS approach

it was a nice poem

a small section of mytwo most relevant poems is a response to this, i dont wish to repeat my views but perhaps i could indicate my stance by pointing out Hazy's response because i fit in that category, 1luv.

good stuff

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^such wonderful feedback ^

i liked it and the style because it made you sound pissed off.....i wasn't offended because i agree with you......i treat women with the utmost respect and can't stand men who give us all a bad rap....you have an excellent point and message in this piece......the choppy sort of flow fit this because it was like this was being written between a fit of tears or just anger......sort of a start stop kinda flow......all in all pretty good drop......

respect..