Be careful who you love... this can happen

The Realist
She always has my undivided attention I love her complexion
At home I get ‘in the zone’ then grasp the situation what a pun
She got years on me about 8 of them, I'm lucky I don’t get suspend
Every 8 am I'm put a bag over my append to cover my ascend
These filthy dreams are seen in taboo magazines that I recommend
I gained a bigger capacity to work, yet I was drastically a flirt
Cause in all my fantasy she had to be in one of those skirts
I once said to her, this class actioned law ‘suit’ doesn’t do you justice
The reminisce of my mental abyss she replied I know you want this
The last day of 12th grade she asked me to stay late and I took the bait
Her topics to dictate were my great change from deadweight to straight A’s
In her class I make her always feel at ease, shes please to see me get a degree
Its my sense of humor she adores yet all I see her striptease me like Demi Moore
Spending days in contemplation of my situation wondering about my occupation
This time seemed best than any to tell her of my infatuation this is all or none
I spoke untill I ran out my lungs, she just looked like she swallowed her tongue
The silence was to deep, I left saying something sweet, yet when I left the suite

Was that mascara on her cheek?

Masta C

In the end, I know some things just weren't meant to be like they happened
I guess I was just confused, and didn't know how to react, to everyones actions
Everyone said "no don't do it" but I did it,..cause I felt it was right
Something I shouldn't have did, but I was just a kid, I remember those nights
They were great, I thought it was fate, but I guess it wasn't meant-to-be
I sent you my love, but in return,…nothing from you was sent-to-me
A crush that shouldn't have happened.., now you got my feeling snapping
Like a twig you easily broke me in two,… I was down all you did was start laughing
Everythings crashing, to much action, no time to react cause I have hate with a passion
My feelings took a bashen, while hate and love went clashen, and my heart took all the slashen
So I gotta face-facts, and I wish I could take-back, everything I did wrong and said
It hurt so much, that my hands were in a clutch, over my chest cause my heart bled red
Now im packing my stuff, and leaving this love, and im making sure it wont happen again
Cause in the end, I learned it was just pretend, and it was something that shouldnt have been
Don't act like I didn't know, cause I do I saw his clothes on the floor, one of my close friends
All this time you was with my boy, you just played me as toy, I guess this is how it ends

We just pick the wrong ones

hey, if you check this out leave us some feedback, its much appreciated, thanks.

This was a decent drop.....stayed on topic.Try some multis/vocab and wordplay....
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^Drop a vote^

That was deep fellas. I liked it. You two are good at telling a story. The shit just clicked. It had a nice flow to it. You guys should collaborate again.

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What the fuck is this?

"These filthy dreams are seen in taboo magazines that I recommend" haha dope
"I once said to her, this class actioned law ‘suit’ doesn’t do you justice" doin "this" is not necesary
"Its my sense of humor she adores yet all I see her striptease me like Demi Moore" dope/clever

nice verse, flow was on point, ur lines
were a bit too long, but hey u had an
orginal style/approach to this, liked the
content, nice, and orignal, like most cats
usually go for the same bullshit, but u
kept it nice and orignal, nice flow with the
multies, really liked that.............................


"In the end, I know some things just weren't meant to be like they happened
I guess I was just confused, and didn't know how to react, to everyones actions" dope opner, gripping
"I sent you my love, but in return,…nothing from you was sent-to-me" bah would sound better if u re worded it, and this-isnt-necesary
"Everythings crashing, to much action, no time to react cause I have hate with a passion
My feelings took a bashen, while hate and love went clashen, and my heart took all the slashen" liked the multies
"All this time you was with my boy, you just played me as toy, I guess this is how it ends" nice ender


u 2 complimented each other's styles,
umm Masta C ur flow was dope in some
points, just keep coming with more multies
wordplay to make this intersting, liked your
style, but it woudl be better if u 2 tried to
match ur styles for this,...........................

over all

nice content, nice flow, good concept
good approach with a lot of originality
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return the favor pl...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81857

POETIC CONCEPT
THE WORDPLAY WAS THERE AS THE MEANING AND PROPER DELIVERY.....
BOTH CAM IN ALOT LIKE DEAD PREZS' MIND SEX UTILIZING SMOOTH WORDS AND DESCRIPTIVE YET TASTEFUL LINES....I WAS IMPRESSED BY THAT A GREAT DEAL!!!!!!!!!!
YOU GUY CAME REAL GOOD HERE AND UPPIN THIS DONT GET SLEPT ON

NICE.............................................. ......No Doubt

I was feelin the concept


peep mine

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82012

Hey thanks for the feedback, keep it coming, its much appreciated, thanks.

Good collab here...

You both complimented each other...

Imagery was nice...
Vocab-decent...

Pretty good flow as well...

Good drop guys...

Peep:
SS Verse: On the Horizon

good piece
pulled it off pretty good
both worked well together on the topic
vocab etc was good from both
flow was choppy in places....about the only complaint

the flow by Masta was excellent...some stuff seemed like it didnt need to be in there though..

They were great, I thought it was fate, but I guess it wasn't meant-to-be
I sent you my love, but in return,…nothing from you was sent-to-me


^a simple yet meaningful line...very nice.


Realist you came good as well...flow wasnt quite as good but your content exceded his...overall i think that you two make a good team...


good job.

^^ love you ma

quick clear up
i concentrated more on the topic than on rhymes, flow, mulits
these lines are much longer than what i usually do
then again.. i still dont know what 'my style' is.. im working on it
this counts as an up...1up

Good Stuff, You Both Complimented Eachothers Style Very Well, The Flow Was There Overall A Dope Drop From Both Of You..

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yo thansk for the feed on my thing...an on to yours...you 2 both came with heat..both verses were well writtin and explained i thought..good wordplay an imaginary..i'd give this 8.5/10

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461