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Old 10-04-03, 02:53 AM   #1
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dreaming in a state

IP: 1BA6 D97B

Its your life
its more than a lie
get away
im so ashamed
I will never be
try to be
its to hard
your life
not mine
escape this horrid
place in the mind
im more than
you got so far
im ahead
im running to fast
more or less
well im out of breath
you got no class
fuck off I hate you
kick your ass
you come back
12 of your friends
seems like the end
fuck this sucks
just need a little luck
dead as fuck
coffins awaits
eternal sleep
feels so awake
dreaming in a state
of awake
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Old 10-04-03, 07:14 AM   #2
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this is wak.........................it was just not happening, why you not writin in lines its easier to follow, the structure is poor the wording is basic the flow wasn't there, i couldn't draw anythin positive from the whole drop, i can see that you are new, but come on, use some multiys, word play...................aight

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