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10-06-03, 03:40 AM | #1 | ||||||
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I Reminisce
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As the clock strikes twelve, the moon rises above
The suns nowhere to be seen, and it is dark thereof Get shoved into darkness and be saved by the light Tonight is the night, we all get along and dont fight Its right, listen to the music, feel the beat Connect with the underground, and feel the street Throw the beat on repeat, let the flows pour out Take a different route, plant the seed in your mind let it sprout See im knoweldgable about, things when it come to this Dont rap dwelling on the past, just sit and reminisce (reminisce) It Exists in the mind, in the back of the mind where you can find Anything thats traped in time, aged like a fine wine Its time to dine, feast, eat the food on your plate you wont get more till you finish what you have Im glad, that i wasnt raised as an underprivelaged child So now im grown not rappin about myself runnin wild Cause as a kid i always smiled, but that has seemed to fade away Fade away to the days when the only thing i had to was to play And it seems so far away, like a million year behind me But i sit and reminisce and little things remind me |
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10-06-03, 04:00 AM | #2 | |||||||
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Sounded good to me, flow was good, structure, nice topic too, kinda makes me wanna be a kid again.
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10-06-03, 12:12 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: EBEF AAB4
thx.. uppin for more feedback
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10-06-03, 12:18 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 3341 3037
Good solid flow throughout...Vocab was good but could of been better...Just comparing to G.Hod...lmao
Your contents and ability to stay on topic was shown here... Props Peep mine and Thugz collab....Pz |
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10-06-03, 12:46 PM | #5 | ||||||
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wuz ghoood this was a good drop you reppin the fam well
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10-06-03, 09:49 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: EC18 012D
^^thanks for the GREAT feedback... that will SOOO help me elevate
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10-07-03, 01:07 AM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 3340 B04F
lmao ^^^^
heres your feed dawgy... flow- your flow was good, you stuck to a good rhyme scheme, and it didnt fall off... you was consistent in the way you rhymed. Throw in some multies... they always lead to astonishment, and can often be the winning factor in battles, open mics, ect... Vocab- was pretty basic except for a few words... if you throw in some good vocab... it shocks the fuck out the reader, and plus it shows that you are intelligent. Wordplay- didnt see much of that either... dont really need it in a drop like this... you did good in this area. Content- your topic was great, overall, it was a rare topic and I enjoyed reading this... plus your ability to stay on topic is outstanding... I'm givin you mad props on that dawgy... your ability to stay on topic is what made this piece a great drop... keep droppin fam... I hope this feedback helps... A.T. |
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10-07-03, 02:32 AM | #8 | |||||||
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"flow- your flow was good, you stuck to a good rhyme scheme,
and it didnt fall off... you was consistent in the way you rhymed. Throw in some multies... they always lead to astonishment, and can often be the winning factor in battles, open mics, ect... Vocab- was pretty basic except for a few words... if you throw in some good vocab... it shocks the fuck out the reader, and plus it shows that you are intelligent. Wordplay- didnt see much of that either... dont really need it in a drop like this... you did good in this area. Content- your topic was great, overall, it was a rare topic and I enjoyed reading this... plus your ability to stay on topic is outstanding... I'm givin you mad props on that dawgy... your ability to stay on topic is what made this piece a great drop... keep droppin fam... I hope this feedback helps... A.T." ^^^ Damn, I cant hate that. I agree, 1
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10-07-03, 03:42 AM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: EBEF AAB4
thanks thats the shit i was lookin for
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10-08-03, 03:30 PM | #10 | |||||||
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The flow was good for one thing. The topic was unique, it was well structured. Other than lacking multies and metas it was a good drop. Stay active fam.
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10-10-03, 01:41 PM | #11 | ||||||
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^^^thx for the feedback... lookin for some more
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