yo,
the velvet curtains open n close like a puppet show
from a past life where prosperity is faint and nothing grows
loving slows to a hateful stop and adds weight
adds days to a long list of never ending bad days
i have faith only when the mic is held tightly
and rhymes are copyrighted in hopes no one will bite me
take it smooth like the wind n strike like a rock, its tai chi
most people cant bite my rhymes anyway, thur spicy
i torture people nicely, some people say its got flavor
but theres a difference between being a ass, and a hater
pimpologys my major, and i always get credit from tha ladies
spit my game so fuckn hard that it looks like i got rabies
smoked out hippie from the 80's put in the 21st century
tryn to liven up the rap game with my unused energy
most of its been wasted on tha drama of daily trouble
its like having ur life in ur hand and all the sudden it gets fumbled
all i do is mumble, nod my head and walk to dark ways
and grip my chest tightly to remove pain from my heart ache
facin my fate from the way the cards lay, i accept it
bear the mic with a mortal fist and do what i do... wreck it..

short keystyle at the end of 2 period... can wait till schools over with... thank the devil its friday..

a cool drop, cud better, basic rhyming scheme tho

keep em coming

and yo, u should peep other peeps shit cuz usually ppl wudnt check ya shit if u dont peep others shit as well


peep ma open mic
[url=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=84427]The Struggle[/ulrl]

shit was nice for a quick keystyle....
this shit wasn't strong on vocab, rhyme scheme was aight,and the shit had a destinct style....
flow was good... concept wasn't nothing new...
kinda short, but thas cool... shit was a keystyle...
descent drop dawg...

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weak vocab, basic rhyme scheem, good for a keystyle

props on the drop,


6.9/10

ill drop kid, good vocab, alright rhyme scheme, all in all tight piece.~1~

Yeah i agree....this was a pretty good drop for a keystyle...it flowed pretty decent i thought...vocab could be up'd...content was good though i thought...Rhyme Scheme was ok, could be better...but keep at it and keep dropping.

and if you could leave some feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84642

yeah i agree with all this was a pretty good drop and had a decent flow and was overall pretty good but u still need to elevate and keep postin and writin look forward to seeing more

yeah this was a decent drop. you need to work on yo vocab and yo metas. the piece was good but there is room fo improvement. just keep writin and elevatin cuz.

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holla at yo boi
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