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Old 10-12-03, 11:42 PM   #1
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hate on the industry

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the rise an fall of deceit fuels my chest.......
an i'm self righteous at best, i'm no more no less.....
but i'm a calm muther fucker, not flagrant or jest......
my beauty exhales through death, leavin' me pissed an the industry hexed.......
now i gotta deal with this infestation of disorder, load up my rifle, steady the butt on my shoulder an aim up a head shot to drop this mainstream pop.....
so fake mc's you betta betta the history you layed or you gonna shatter, wake up one day an see the phallacies you portrayed....
all tricks you played and countless souls you slayed.......
an guess what, your gonna lie in the muther fuckin' bed you made......
cause you got played, an like del said you seen betta days.....
so fake mc's who think you got it made keep puffin' l's an i'm gonna wait for the day when comp can come up and deflect your rays in camouflage ways an steal your fan base.....
with true rhymes that inject malady an infect the public with ill sense of what to expect from mc's........
like the 36th chamber did for 1993




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Old 10-12-03, 11:49 PM   #2
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first off just for visual aspect you should put each line under each other...helps with reading

all in all it was ok, but basic
flow was there, but the vocab was basic,
topic was not that narrow, so you had pleanty to work with but came out with not alot
dont think im being mean...just trying to help

if you would be so kind
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