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Old 10-12-03, 01:19 PM   #1
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SS - Freeze In Time

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..Before Actions
..The Chance To Change It..
.. The Answers ..
.. His Thought ..

He Could Get His Life In Focus, His Wife To Know This..
Hear The Right Voices.. Only If.. Time Was Frozen..


He Wished He Could See His Life The Way He En-Visioned It –
Yet It’s the Simplistic Shit That Makes All The Differences –
You Ask Yourselves The “What Ifs’’ And “If That’s” –
“What If So n’ So Didn’t Think Or Didn’t Do That ?” –
Back To Back.. You Hear The Same Pressed Lessons –
Wished He Could Turn Back To Answer The Following Questions.. –

What If Kennedy Never Got Shot, Would He Still Live In Infamy? –
If Beethoven Wasn’t Deaf, Would He Still Be Inspired By His Symphonies? –
If The Planes Malfunctioned, Would Iraq N’ America Still Be Fightin?..
If The Bomb Never Ignited, Would Timothy McVeigh Still Be Indicted?..
If Columbine Wasn’t The First School, Would Their Still Be Violence?..
If Their Never Was A WWII, Would America N’ Japan Still Be Allianced?..
If Color Wasn’t Segregated, Would Black People Still Be Hated?..
If KKK Never Birthed, Would Martin Luther King N’ Rosa Parks Be Out-Dated? –
If Pac N’ Big Were Never Shot, Would Hip Hop Still Be So Strongly Influencial? –
If A Pencis Wasn’t So Essential.. Would Their Be Hype For Potential ? -
If He Didn’t Think Of All The “Ifs” Would He Have A Happier Life ? –
If He Could Think Of All The “Ifs”.. How Many “ifs” Would He Write? –


He Got The Chance To Get His Life In Focus.. His Wife To Know This..
Personally Hear The Right Voices, He Was Back.. When Time Was Frozen..


He Stopped The Bullet, From Reachin Kennedy.. He Served His Term –
And He Learned.. That His Infamous Speeches Were Still In Textual Words –
The Planes Never Hit, Which Was Praised And Immune To See –
Yet In All Of Its Goodness, America Was Still Far From Unity –
McVeigh Never Found Out, His Crimes Left Silent –
Columbine Never Shot Up, Therefore Stopping District Violence –
WWII Never Started.. Leaving Peace Good N’ Un-Foiled –
Soiled, Yet He Never Knew The Hate Of Inner Turmoil –
Stopped Color Discrimination, The King’s Speech Never Heard –
KKK Never Formed, But Still Felt For Freedom They Thought They Deserved –
Their Was No Heurse.. For Biggie Or Tupac’s Deaths –
Rap Stayed w/ Whats Their n’ Never Ventured To Whats Next –
He Smiled, Never Thought Of Problems.. Just Opptomistic –
Thought He Made Everything Right.. Answered All Of His Ifs Listed –


Time Came Back.. After His Self Re-Adjustments Of Differences –
But Everything Wasn’t Right.. Not The Way He En-Visioned It –
Something Was Missin.. He Listened, N’ Looked Around –
His Home Town, Was To Say The Least….. Alone Now –
What Had Happened? What Did He Do.. What In The Hell ? –
Rubble Of Buildings.. Acid Fumes Filled His Smell –
Bombs And Gases, He Thought He Stopped The Threat –
Japanese Flags All Around.. Guess They Had To At Sum Set –
And The Sun Set, Was Nothing Less Than Faded Light –
Remembered His Life.. Had To Get To His Loving Wife –
Found Her, She Was Re-Married.. Now What Has Happened –
Then Remembered Looking.. Then His Face Saddened –
His Father Met A Nurse During A Battle In World War Two –
That Was His Mother, But He Was Too Power Stricken w/o Clue –
If He Never Went Back In Time Would He Be So Torn ? –
If He Didn’t “If” Himself So Much.. He Would Have Still Been Born –


He Got The Chance To Get His Life In Focus.. His Wife To Know This..
Hear The Right Voices, But Now He’s Stuck.. Somewhere Where Time Is Frozen
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Old 10-12-03, 01:24 PM   #2
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This was really complex.. Alot of thought had gone into this..

The content stayed on topic superbly.. Your vocab and flow suited this piece undoubtably well.. Cuz I was enjoying the whole read..So good job done man..

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Old 10-12-03, 02:21 PM   #3
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Old 10-12-03, 05:17 PM   #4
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damn homie this was nice, i dunno y all ur posts get slept on, cause this was hella dope, u stayed on topic throughout the whole post, ur vocab and wordplay were great, ur flow was on target throughout the whole drop, ur content and topic were hella original, keep droppin man, soon enough people will realize u got mad skill at open mic, great shit.....

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Old 10-12-03, 06:04 PM   #5
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you got mad skillz
great flow and vocab
keep on droppin
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