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lil diss (have a look)
IP: C444 58BC
this is basically about some kid at school, who bites more than a fat man. please give feedback as you can tell i aint exacly some 50 million quid rapper
i spit my lyrics so hard you might as well eat my flem/ who ya tryin to be some kind fatboy eminem/ i think every west side gangsta has been biten/ why dont you say something that you have actually written/. your the worlds first 8 mile peadophile/ you try to emulate eminem you need your own style/ you bite so much your worse than vile/ if you were on the radio i'd definetly mess with the dial/. i know its short but hey im still learning, so give me some feedback. |
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
this was not good man, it was very basic, the structure was off,
it was like you took a bunch of words you wanted to rhyme and then just filled in the rest...............try using metas and strong punch lines, when ya dis'n.........and multis always go down good..........keep practcing....hope you take on board the feed...see ya |
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