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Old 10-17-03, 09:29 AM   #1
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Exceptance. .

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Exceptance. .

Excepted faith; blatant hate; put my life at its stake for death,
& continued to pace my steps; so I can concetrate on breath. .
Glitched my system as a whole, sent emotions on the brink of
control, feel the devils presence within, its corrupting the soul. .
Walk planks with drum rolls; focused on a death of disregaurd,
breaking the fourth wall - but it was impossible to move a barge. .
Finding it hard; to follow in the footsteps of the great & power,
felt sour, would wait an iternity for something that takes hours. .
Contracted my voice so I wasnt heard; what I say would disturb
& all the hate I have gained, put to action when I spoke words. .
Radiant light hurt, the darkness of lifes shadow still covers me,
made discoveries, blinded by the attempt to look deep & see ,
Abbilities possesed; acceptance of death but I would die free. .
Could walk waters of pain, braught tears to the world of sane,
when a tear dropped from my frame, I made the sky pour rain. .
Purged thoughts; been there, done that, already fought hate,
strength contained for my venomous punches packed your fate. .
Focus was blurred; all of the world heard my words, spoke little,
my mind made a genius look puny, spoke clear with a true riddle. .
Kept trying to end deceit, able to make disbelievers begin belief,

I am one with nature, & had to except that the higher being is me. .

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Old 10-17-03, 09:46 AM   #2
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See, i always thought rap sounded good when it was REAL! This is like some poetry spirital fantasy. Yo, i ain't slating it. It's really good.. But .. Ya know what i mean. Good tho, keep it up !!
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Old 10-17-03, 11:00 AM   #3
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Good imagery here man...

Nice shit...
Topic was a little blah...

But good structure....
Good internals...

Ill stuff...

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Old 10-17-03, 11:03 AM   #4
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I Know. .

Cant Wait. . = )
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Old 10-17-03, 11:05 AM   #5
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This had the best flow yet that you've dropped with very good imagery.. The whole piece was fuckin tight..

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Old 10-17-03, 11:11 AM   #6
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yeah i agree this was quite a tight drop......the flow was good, but i think it would have been better broken down maybe into 2 verses, wit a hook.........but it was still decent.....
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Old 10-17-03, 11:47 AM   #7
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very creative piece here, nice drop u have yo, flow was on point and all that, feelin it

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