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Pass me by, walk the other way and pretend I don’t exist
Pass me by, as if you don’t know me, I can only insist Treat me like we’ve never met and I’m a complete stranger to you I can act like nothing happened, like u don’t know me nor I you, You never cared for me after all we’ve been through b4 so why would u now? You don’t know how you made me feel inside and you’ll never know how, If you woulda been there when I needed then things coulda worked out, If you woulda took the time to listen to me and figgure out what I’m about, I cared for you and I always took my time to listen, But you didn’t so a pieca my hearts missen, Why you playin’ with emotions? Why u actin so cruel? To actually fall for you I knew I was a fool, One night of affection, you’re a one night stand…. You know what, I’m over it on the other hand, Your callin’ my number and your paging me after, I sit here and play you like u played me in laughter.
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Lady you have something in common with so many people that 2 bar scheme that makes erading such a joy its an easy free form that actually make sit pleasant for the reader I loved the second stanza I thought it may be the back bone to your piece…in my op…again I appreciate the easy read it was pleasurable
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OMG!!! LoL so tru u got aim or msn?
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nope (comp issues) but i got PM"S n email lmao
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iight
i liked the total overlook of this piece, coz although it starts as this im upset coz you used me piece, i love how you stay strong so that when the guy actually comes limping back to you, it doesnt happen that she thinks that he knows better now it wont happen again shit, that you gave it right back to him!! while i was reading it half way throu the flow and structure changed a bit but when i finished reading it i understood that it changed when the way the poem and emotions did. so that worked. your second line was my fave but i agree the second stanza was the back bone of the piece. nice drop ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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Thank you! I'm glad that people like you actually read this and understand this
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In most aspects, this looks like something that would have been written to me. Something kinda like this happened but i didn't mean for it. My true love came back to me and the other made the mistake for fallin in love wit me. I let the head on my shoulders and my heart pick and of course I went back to my true love. It only comes once in a lifetime and I have found it. I knew the other girl for a month and she tried to bitch me out cuz i followed my heart. Anyways great peice. It's ones like this that get slept on and missed. Spect, JT
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Smooth JT that is awsome feedback for real! thank you for sharing that with me, I love to get to kow people especially if they can relate to my work!
Much Respect!
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anymore feedback?
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