Im here reperesentin eminem planet/
if u make a death wish, im her ta grant it/
Take u ta hell, its so hot u cant stand it/
you aint goin ta heaven, not even if u demand it/
jump on satans dick, dip stick, ill pussy lick you/
and if that shit aint enogh bitch ill stick you/
I aint rhymed in a while, but check this keystyle/
at least i dont copy lines off 8 mile, after a while/
ill be spitin hot shit again, theres no need to offened/
i just need ta fuckin find some insperation my friend....

this had no feel to it, rhyming with the same words at the end..

[if u make a death wish, im her ta grant it/
Take u ta hell, its so hot u cant stand it/
you aint goin ta heaven, not even if u demand it/]

wont get you no elevation, also it was too short and the flow was off......but more effort into it, think about it more...peace

havent u heard any of Eminems shit..u know hes used a word to rhyme with it self MANY times

LOL crist we've another eminem wanna-be,when will this kids stop?

.*Whack*


Go Back To Eminem Planet Please.... I swear to god- Eminems words may rhyme like that but ya know what Ima break it down fo ya....



Vocabulary-None
Wordplay-None
Metas-None
Rhymes- Everyend word but they lacked everything.

You need to quit try'n to be like Eminem and Elevate...

Eminem would be ashamed lol ... You and your lil friends are crazy

I gotta agree wit tha rest of em. Dont use a style exactly like his man. I used tha DMX type shit where he says shit at tha end wit his shoutin but I mixed it wit my own style. Maybe u should do a open mic but wit ur own style kinda wit a different style mixed wit it. Not exactly like sum1 elses. But yea. This wasnt good. Dont stop and just elevate. Peep my piece "True Felonz (FreestyleFelons Diss)".

^^^

Exactly... On The Microphone I use 5 Styles.. I switch them up everysong.

1st Style - Tupac
2nd Style - Eminem
3rd Style - ShEmY - My Own Style.
4th Style - Busta Rhymes
5th Style - Any kind of southern style mixed wit Mid-West Flavor.

I juss mix everything up. I didn't mean to be such an asshole that is what I was try'n to say.

So Elevate...

I aint no damn em impersanator i just proved a point here..god i dont try and copy him

^^^you must be trying to copy him

^^I rest my case

its a web site..i came from there IM REPRESENTIN homies from the site DUMMMMMMMMMMMMMB AAAAAAAAAASS

but still dawg... Ur tryina cop his style. Just like i said. Just elevate and mix up styles wit ur own. I know u reppin but dont try to take em's style. Only he can use his style all tha way.