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10-18-03, 03:00 PM
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Gladiators
IP: EE88 2083
The Gladiator
12 men standing...but theres an air of silence, Thousands turned up...to witness incredible violence, Fates decided...on the turn of a single thumb, The man with the power...to the crowd he will sucummb, Slaves forced to fight...to satisfy romes lust for blood, By that night...remains of corpses buried in the mud, Wife turned widows...children forced to bury their father, women weep...but the gladiators cry much harder, they get on with each other...help one another, when in the collseum...its like killing a brother, This was reality...not a ficticious fallacy, Real men...real weapons...and real casualities, |
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10-18-03, 03:02 PM
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IP: FF40 570D
Nice, ...
Real nice ... Short ...nice vocab....good flow, ...on-topic, .... change CGS to RoA ...k  Pz
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10-18-03, 03:55 PM
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IP: A04B E7DD
This was a dope piece dawg, even though it was only about 1 verse long it really made me picture the Collisium, the emotion and the intensity of it all. You stayed on the topic well, it's a relativly original drop, i've not seen another topic like this in Open Mic so far..
Bars like: "Wife turned widows...children forced to bury their father, women weep...but the gladiators cry much harder," ... "Slaves forced to fight...to satisfy romes lust for blood, By that night...remains of corpses buried in the mud," - really showed your true ability. You have killa vocab and you ability to make me feel the emotion was real! Overall: 4/5, it was a dope drop dawg, not much wrong with it, amybe a bit longer next time? |
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10-18-03, 04:01 PM
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
this was a good short read, liked the original subject, you made good use of vocab and it flowed nicely, the only sort of negative thing i would say is the rhyming scheme was quite simple, maybe some multis would add to the effect.......peace....
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10-18-03, 07:24 PM
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IP: EE88 2083
up...
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10-18-03, 09:06 PM
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IP: E50F 289B
Makes me think of the movie... liked the way you described the shit...
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10-19-03, 01:00 AM
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: 0A3D 883F
Nice man very nice
it flowed really nice...well in the way i read it anyway the vocab was good wish it was longer tho peace keep droppin |
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10-19-03, 03:45 AM
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IP: FAD5 0872
niiiice drop here...length was fine, u said what u wanted to say... got a message accross in a short amount of words and u came with creativity and originality...talkin bout history was good, its very unique...keep this up..maybe we should collab some time
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10-19-03, 09:33 AM
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IP: EE88 2083
yeh sure, hit me up in about a week on aim or summat,
im writin for a few collabs this week, anyway thanx for the feedback, look out for some more soon! |
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10-19-03, 10:51 AM
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IP: E42E 6E35
peep some of my open mics aight...any thats out right now is keystyled though with no editin.
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10-19-03, 10:15 PM
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..Soft Focus..
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IP: EE90 39CE
good piece, short but sweet, good wordplay and topic, i liked it...mad flow...keep it up
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10-19-03, 10:29 PM
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IP: 399E F0FD
your lyrix were hot in the beginning but it looked like you lost track tord the end~~~~~ but it was good over all
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