It’s over whore, ya lucks ran out at tha door, fuk playin me for?
You must be a nymph, adore dik bitch u cheating me Lauren?
Emotions pour in Fuk that Force my mandibles apart and start jawin
Yawnin as she gags, an visit memories, I've had it above tha limit
All this time, ya love wasn’t in it, At this point of pivot im livid
Shit this chick's thirst for dik is vivid, pussy is given
Can't live wit this, had me thinking it's bliss, we even had kids
I promise this time my fists wont miss the hit to shift your ribs
Prick punch you until my ick is massaging ya vocal cords
Fukked up! in everywhere multiple cums even at local pubs
Fukked up! I think my fists need to visit your glove creases
Snatch some syringes, you cringe as tha tip enters deepest
Lieing thru teeth bitch, weak bitch, you told me you sweet bitch
Come to find out your pussies leaking , reaching every penis bitch
Devilish, my feelings forced, you act like my spirit’s irrelevant
On tha phone hearing other n!99as yellin shit, Cock it back an level em
Mental’s not there, so to match I’ll put Great Clips in your skull
Don’t get it bitch?.. It’s a Barber shop, doll! Your head’ll be Null!
Fuk it I’m going off, banging this bitches crest on floorboards
Call tha cops!, I’ll just Break tha alarm with your forearms
Seeping your essence to levels in Forlorn and mourn Lauren
NO more you should of learned from tha first siren of violence
Instead you with me, getting your eyes slit, with a Fiber Optic Knife tips
Piercing your vaginal membranes and pissin on tha wound
That’s tha only way ima mark territory, for guarding tha pussy room
Die bitch! Quit pushing it wont move, my hands from your tubes
Boy Scout Knotted Thru, manual I demantle your mantle Boo.
Fuk it, I’ll end it quick with a crowbar shoved up to your Nose
Froze tha body and chopped tha hands , singe them it’s clues, No?
Bleach tha whole physical, Love will make shit “UnForgettable”
Never know I was crazy? After tha first 5 blows you was veget table
Unable to fight off tha ample strenth of a man whos on tha brinks
Drinkin my worries away thinkin astray think, I'll just de thaw u and make an amence

thought the topic was ok, the structure was off and so was the flow , it wasn't a very good read, maybe because you are not writtin in lines ,its not reading properly.........its easier to follow in bars......maybe you have thought too much about the content, and not enough about the rest.....keep practicing aight.........

Structure was off... probably effected the way the whole rhyme flows... good topic.... keep workin' at it....