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Old 10-21-03, 01:22 AM   #1
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What if it was you! By: Word~Perfect feat. A.T.

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WHAT IF IT WAS YOU
by: Word~Perfect feat. A.T.


<chorus> (A.T.)
What if it was yo that was broke as fuck and livin on the streets,
Stuck with this dumb luck that constantly keeps you on your knees,
Smokin this weed is the only thing that keeps me from giving up on my dreams,
So it seems that we aint livin from the same place, but... what if it was you....

(Word~Perfect)
Instead of forfilling my prt of the deal-
She never received love so I was just a meal.
The truth of abuse cut a wund weed fumes couldn’t heal.
Did drugs-hung with thugs- I had no sef esteam and you expect me to love.
Yeah I went to the club-back door alleys begging for left overs and subs.
Tattered jeans-im at the bottom of the barel, robbing crack fiends.
Looking at my friends turn grown men but ami when I never seen my teens?
Im still broke now and wonder why I survived-
Cause no matter what this is me this is the price to be alive.
Frost bitten tears no emotion nobody to love me-
My wifes dead and so are my babies,
and the government says for me to love this country?
think of this and see how im provoked-
i gave it up for a rich life that gave me up cause i was broke.

(A.T.)
yo,
This worlds full of guys who risk they lives when they drink and drive,
and beat they wives until their unborn children die,
I never in my life thought I'd recite another decieteful rhyme, because Im a peaceful guy,
But theres only so much that one man can take before becoming brutally honest,
I'm broke in more than one way, broke emotionally and economic,
Word~Perfect brought up this topic, so I thought I'd jump on it,
and show the world what shits like when shits comin from my closet... yo


<chorus> (A.T.)
What if it was you, that was broke as fuck and livin on the streets,
Stuck with this dumb luck that constantly keeps you on your knees,
Smokin this weed is the only thing that keeps me from giving up on my dreams,
So it seems that we aint livin from the same place, but... what if it was you....


(Word~Perfect)
poverty stricken-bed ridden-
government talk but they riddlen-
everything has an angle we agressivley play victom.
But who truly victimized-beneath free skies-
Where we can get robbed and killed for a fee so we pay to die.
I cant deny-im a part of the problem –my method of solven-
Was creating another problem robben with 6 rvolven.
I was an infant raising an infant-
my future went from instant to distant.
13 dropping out of school a fool taught jewels.
To bad I couldn’t afford to pawn them so it just fed fuel.
Waking up to my baby crying I know no harm was ment-
But my queen couldn’t afford life let alone our apartment
Worked my 9 to 5 buts washing cars wouldn’t heal a workers scars-
Plus I promiced her better, but instead delivered sub par.
I remember the first time I caught her cheating-
How my heart took a beating-
I gave all that I had sacrificed my childhood to be a dad
Still wasn’t what she was needing- looking at my hands bleeding.
What argument could I oppose?
we’d been married a year and I was still wearing the same clothes, so...


<chorus> (A.T.)
What if it was you, that was broke as fuck and livin on the streets,
Stuck with this dumb luck that constantly keeps you on your knees,
See smokin this weed is the only thing that keeps me from giving up on my dreams,
So it seems that we aint livin from the same place, but... what if it was you....

(A.T.)
I've filed and formated, viewed and edited,
meditated and demonstrated, been accused and left for dead,
you choose to light my fuse and we fight and fued,
until I arrive at you with an excuse to tell you that I'm threw and then you start to beg.
You coward down before me and expect me forgive and forget,
But you dont see my point of view, just the other side of it.
So why should I do as you Say????????????
You Leave me at the Scene of the crime and tell me it will be O.K.
For the most part, I guess your just negitive natured,
cause your accusin me of more shit than the U.S. legislature,
and I wont hesitate to, break some shit off before I get in some shit thats just too deep,
again I'm losing sleep, cause your lovin is what I'm shootin to keep.
So I'm choosin to leave... tryin keep my entire mindframe straightened.
cause I'll be damned if I ever end up like my dad and refuse to make a statement,
yo...


<chorus> (A.T.)
What if it was you, that was broke as fuck and livin on the streets,
Stuck with this dumb luck that constantly keeps you on your knees,
See smokin this weed is the only thing that keeps me from giving up on my dreams,
So it seems that we aint livin from the same place... but what if it was you....
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Old 10-21-03, 01:24 AM   #2
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just peiced this together a min ago... I didnt get home till late
so I had to do it quickly...
give us your feedbackk.... and Word P- if I didnt hit the topic well,
sorry, Im just mad tired.
~Ashy~
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Old 10-21-03, 01:26 AM   #3
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this shit was mad sick i liked words
peice too. props to both keep the
Ill open miks and colabs comin
your guyz shit is always nice to read.
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Old 10-21-03, 02:09 AM   #4
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YOU DID GREAT A.T. NO DOUBT YOUR TALENT SHINES
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Old 10-21-03, 02:23 AM   #5
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Damn... nice collab... first off.... the Hook was nice... intro'd the track well..... Word, that was one of the best verses i've seen from you... really deep and had me vibing to it*I rap out loug everything i read* .... you've really up'd ur game since i've been gone,,,,,,,,

AT- never seen anything from you but you came out strong... some lines didnt make much sense but thats something you can work on... dont focus on forcing the flow too much... try to just get what ur trying to say out there and format it to flow better.. try to work on ur structure... you have potential... keep writing..



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Old 10-21-03, 11:15 AM   #6
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Uppin... and thankz for da feedback peeps.
~Ashy~
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Old 10-21-03, 11:27 AM   #7
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This was nice... good vocab and wordplay from both. Word... your best line was...

'Frost bitten tears no emotion nobody to love me-
My wifes dead and so are my babies,
and the government says for me to love this country?.

That was ill...

A.T., your best line was...

But theres only so much that one man can take before becoming brutally honest,
I'm broke in more than one way, broke emotionally and economic,
Word~Perfect brought up this topic, so I thought I'd jump on it,
and show the world what shits like when shits comin from my closet... yo

That was sick... Loved the collab.... keep it comin'...
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Old 10-21-03, 03:54 PM   #8
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uppin
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Old 10-22-03, 12:01 AM   #9
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damn... what the fuck can a person do to get some feedback,
I've upped this thing 2 times, and its been moved to the second
page twice... give some feedback... how can we make this better,
and elevate...
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Old 10-22-03, 01:19 AM   #10
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UPPIN THIS A.T. DONT GET FRUSTREATED THE BEST ARTIST AND PHILOSOPHERS SPENT THEIR LIVES UNOTICED JUST DO WHAT WE LOVE MOST AND KEEP WRITTING
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Old 10-22-03, 02:26 AM   #11
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good shit u 2, really feeling this, i hope to see more productions like this.. mad props
peace
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Old 10-22-03, 04:17 AM   #12
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yEAH... that's nice. I thought you guys were well acquianted when i started reading, but it appears otherwise. Good contrast of styles between yous two. Some nice verses(nice dosn't seem right)from both, I really liked words second verse(even tho' its some tragic shit)and a.t.s second(nice multies n' shit)
Maybe you guys should do up some more positive stuff if ya got it in ya, cause that shit was kinda depressing.(butt dope)

PEACE Pimpin Island Life - Long
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