Scream phoenix,once the chains are broken you shall
Expand your wingtips.
Emotion sickness might set in but with perscriptions it
Can be extinguished.

'The past is the past get past it dont ask if you would ever
Like to change the way that anythings happened,
Just elevate all aspects of hope floats for the future.

Confirm your cordinates interact with subordinates,
Respect authority amongst this diaper dandy
Ecosystems producers.

Your an oak tree be cautious of your branches
Making more friends,
Steel structures cant be broken down by
Hands of porcelin.

Attending church services isnt 'required'
Just dont be a liar.
Treat your spouse right keep your mouth
Tight till 'post morteum.

What goes around you know the rest angels in the
Outfield are supportive,
So you can stroll through that city of love as a
Passionate tourist.

Conserve your emotions little one existance
Is exausting,
Play it safe dont let your kismet coincide
With something costly.

Now you might think im babbling on and you
Might remain unsure of me,
But when you experience a childs birth you'll
Experience purity.

(2x)
Life is a game it goes on and people change
Under the layers through trials and trivulations
Situations placed in, for better or worse whatever
Is first jumpstarts a daily path its never a curse
Its full circle.


Rejoice angel,many awaited your arrival to
rework the angles.
Fallen wingman takes on many forms but the
strong cant mental strangle.

Its possibe in any shape or form when candles
were lit at both ends,
Flags raised for a snowstorm persevreance.

Lucky charms storll through the parks ended now
Its time to collect your winnings,
All that music in your spirit will now be seen
the clearest,
Respected accepted perspectavies of fearless,
Leadership among all aspects of the field..forreal..

Okay..meloncholy movements in tune with this
Concrete jungles slithering snakes that quiver
And quake..never noticed but ill be sure to put
On my state, as a nomad..godzilla juckie gonads
Crewless now unconfuse it,

This is heavenly con muthafuckin flows confusing complex,
Real lyricists dont make it to my candid camera birds eye,
All lyrics are poetry dont ever take this emcee for grant,
Like Guru said ill leave you right where you stand,

Spirits live on through another.....full circle motherfucker


All Rights Reserved ©...couldn't spit it anyway

Its funny how the mind of a very ill poet works...I told you that you were ill on HHE and this piece doesn't change my mind one bit. it ups the statement I made.. The flow was beautifully thought out yeah at certain points it got jumpy but hell doesn't that always happen...the vocab you displayed the content in which you used them were (for lack of a better term) Amazing. Well done on this piece fam...keep bringing the realness...

~100~

Its possibe in any shape or form when candles
were lit at both ends,
Flags raised for a snowstorm persevreance.

^my god that is fucking dope, those who don't get it don't deserve to.
I'm glad you wrote a song from this, i loved the wordplay, I couldn't catch the flow at first then I got it , reread the piece and it was smooth as hell

Rejoice angel,many awaited your arrival to
rework the angles.
Fallen wingman takes on many forms but the
strong cant mental strangle.

the entire piece had an underlying spiritual theme to it but this was not as subtle as other parts.

Scream phoenix,once the chains are broken you shall
Expand your wingtips.
Emotion sickness might set in but with perscriptions it
Can be extinguished.

the beginning is ill because it fits the theme so well. also a great way to start off a "topical" piece. sort of an emcee/poet rising out of the ashes to do bigger and better things. seemed a little personal to me

Okay..meloncholy movements in tune with this
Concrete jungles slithering snakes that quiver
And quake..never noticed but ill be sure to put
On my state, as a nomad..godzilla juckie gonads
Crewless now unconfuse it,

you don't structure your verses in the conventional way which is probably why most say your stuff dosen't flow or whatever. really they are just to lazy to read through and find the flow on their own. you are one of the better writers on this board and i give you your props..

Rejoice angel,many awaited your arrival to
rework the angles.
Fallen wingman takes on many forms but the
strong cant mental strangle

Scream phoenix,once the chains are broken you shall
Expand your wingtips.
Emotion sickness might set in but with perscriptions it
Can be extinguished

first of all i am glad you made this into a full length song i thought it was dope but couldn't say so due to the tourney. the two lines above are ill because they teeter on the edge of spirituality without actually going there. what you end up with is a rebirth of self type piece.


Your an oak tree be cautious of your branches
Making more friends,
Steel structures cant be broken down by
Hands of porcelin.

open micers probably wouldn't recognize this ill use of multi's without the highlighting and effect. i like how you make the words fit what you are trying to say, rather than conforming to preconcieved ideas of rhyming. makes your entire style stick out like a well shined penny.

This is heavenly con muthafuckin flows confusing complex,
Real lyricists dont make it to my candid camera birds eye,
All lyrics are poetry dont ever take this emcee for grant,
Like Guru said ill leave you right where you stand

this is just plain raw i most enjoyed how you managed to work the shortened version of your name in there. made me go DAAAYUUUMM. the entire piece was awesome but this put it over the top.

Life is a game it goes on and people change
Under the layers through trials and trivulations
Situations placed in, for better or worse whatever
Is first jumpstarts a daily path its never a curse
Its full circle.

what i liked about the chorus was it was catchy but it didn't fail to fufill its role which is sum up the piece...........you stuck it because it didn't say to much or too little.......your illness humbles me......i am not at all surprised at how well this turned out........tic is the shit look how much talent we have just between the two of us.......don't let them doubt you homie keep killing'em with words


respect...

iight

Content man when i first read this parts of it were over my head, but i could grasp hold of some of the concept, and could see the greatness it held then, but after a short explanition and reading it a few more times, i picked up that smooth flow, and a bigger meanign of the whole piece, and i feel in love with it. to me this part stood out the most

Now you might think im babbling on and you
Might remain unsure of me,
But when you experience a childs birth you'll
Experience purity.

the parts that tend to jump out at me are ones that in some way or another i can relate to or bring up some of my old memories.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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This was a deep peice. The flow was good, sounds better, for those of us who have had the privilage of hearing it, to the track tho. I think written down you have more of a chance to appreciate the lyrics for their depth and their structure. And really soak up the meaning of this and apply it to some personal aspect of your life so that you can feel it more truely and more intune with yourself. This was a peice that you had to put full attention into. Something that demanded it, because it was that elaborate. And if something or some one upsets you jus remember that we may not be on as high of a playing feild as you are, don't get frustrated, jus patiently wait for us to catch up there babe! And I got stuff to tell ya! Love you! Great peice, but you already knew that, jus had to make the rest of us feel inadiquate didn't cha babe? haha, peace

At first when I read it I had to read it again and again. Then I started putting it together and got it. Most of the time when i read I try and comprehend what lil i can but with this I kept reading so I could get the full view of your words. thank you for the good read. It fit together smooth and was great for a song. respect

hmmm..this thread grew wings and set its sights on the clouds...