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Old 10-19-03, 06:14 PM   #1
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Asylum

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Can’t you distinguish? From the British and English
Only Scots, Welch and Irish were proud to attain this
As England’s engagement is the greatest attainment
Now far to complacent, now losing containment
Too much asylum swarm like a real living ailment,
-Running adjacent, tryin overtaking us blatant
What happened to our nation, comin like a rat infestation?
But cant use poison or traps for the clean up operation,
-Overdue extermination, must be a living termination
Need extradition, wake up wit the pitiful wishin,
It’s no competition, no freeloading admission.
Don’t fit our machine, just like expelled ammunition
Country don’t need them, they creatin a partition
Between the willing to help and the right wing oppo-si-tion
I meet in the middle, no blood but no entrance giv-in……..
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Old 10-19-03, 07:32 PM   #2
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One thread per day
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Old 10-20-03, 07:44 AM   #3
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what do you mean 1 thread per day, this i the ONLY one ive posted today, my first one was done the day before, if you check it......................................;.....
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Old 10-20-03, 02:56 PM   #4
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This was a alright drop...it flowed pretty decent i thought...your vocab was good...you had some good multies...i liked how you ended the piece it was alright...your structure was pretty good i thought too...overall it was a alright drop...keep at it...and keep dropping.

and if you could return some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86721
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Old 10-21-03, 05:20 AM   #5
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thnx man, needed some feedback, cant seem to get much of it anymore.....dunno whats happening, but it needs sorted........think cos its people think im a newbie,....peace ma dawg..1!!!!!!!!!
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Old 10-21-03, 05:58 PM   #6
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Ay, it was cool, the flow was nice, i liked the continuous multis...ima look for more from you, and ill reply too ha....

good sh!t
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Old 10-21-03, 06:14 PM   #7
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thats pretty good I like ther beggining political aspect
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Old 10-21-03, 09:16 PM   #8
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ok, flow was nice, nice use of mulites in the peice....vocab was nice also...structure was good and so was the content...overall it was a good drop...i look foward to reading more of your shit...keep dropping son...
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Old 10-21-03, 09:54 PM   #9
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Dope shit. Well structured with good multies and ill flow.
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Old 10-22-03, 06:15 AM   #10
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good shit...multiez were good...flow was good...the structure and creativity were also dope...vocab was on point...overall this was a nice drop...
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Old 10-24-03, 07:41 AM   #11
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thanx for the positive shit.......much appreciated dawgs

keep readin..........peace to all......
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