wishing i never met you
seems difficult to believe
but you were unfaithful and untrue
your very own friend you decieved

i thought we could work shit out
because we have been through so much
but now i know without a doubt
i can live without your touch

i no longer want your fake kisses
i no longer want to hear your name
i dont want to be in your wishes
i dont want to keep things the same

forget those memories that we shared
forget our long talks at night
forget that i ever cared
forget that I was the one who made everything right

you cheated on your girlfriend
and you lied like hell to me
its time for this to end
please just let me be

I'm sorry things had to end like this
I'm sorry you're so fake
but, however, there's one thing I'll miss
and that's ending my best mistake

so with my last words to you i will say
you have a wonderful girl
be there for her in every way
dont let her escape from your world.

Not to bad of a peice..

i liked the first verse alot

and i liked this line alot

"but, however, there's one thing I'll miss
and that's ending my best mistake"

i thought that you only touched on the emotions you were feeling tho...

ok...

well it was a good read, but i think you have to work on structure a tad bit. the emotion was good, not over overwhelming. vocab could be brought up some. flow was alright, try to even out some of the really long bars thou. and message, was good, you put it out nice simple and clear. i like that. keep posting!!!!!!

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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Nice piece gurl, seems unfinished tho. I thought everything was good on it, ya kno that. Good scheme, and there was a lot of emotion comin outta this, and believe me, it was felt. Great job. Keep it up, much respect.