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Old 11-02-03, 02:02 AM   #1
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"Originality" by Liphe Senince

My flow is kind of stop-and-go but I mainly did this track to work on my quality.
Yeah..
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Old 11-02-03, 02:52 AM   #2
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I'm listenin' now and the first verse is not good, the second verse is cool, better delivery and more into the flow and beat. I say this a lot on this site but you need better mic presence and need to come with more confidensec on the mic. You got a good feel for the beat just wreck that fuckin mic a lil more. This doesen't mean screem just come harder you sound a lil bitchish on the mic, not so soft. If you keep droppin and workin on this shit you'll see elevation only then. I see you got only 1 cut on soundclick. I'd like to check yer progress and see what yer spittin on yer fifth or sixth cut. Get better, but good effort. You had a good break and descent chorus. Yer structure was good i would take that as a major positive from this drop. Check my new cut..."A Thievez Execution" in songs forum and feedback kiiiid.
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Old 11-02-03, 03:02 AM   #3
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^ Respect, man..
It's not very often that I see constructive critism anymore.
I'll work on that, though. Thanks for the tips.
Ups for more feedback.
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Old 11-02-03, 04:18 AM   #4
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^Uppin'^
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Old 11-02-03, 04:23 AM   #5
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aight........i agree wit Bliss on thiz one......but I do have 2 admit the 2nd verse iz way better then the first....I say keep up wit mic presence and keep spittin playa.....you'll be str8.....keep elevatin and itz all good.....ima be watchin yah progress az well.....
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Old 11-02-03, 01:37 PM   #6
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^ Much appreciated.
Keep the feedback comin'.

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Old 11-02-03, 06:06 PM   #7
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Emotion needs some mega ups bro. Your 1st verse is just pointless, seems like a freestyle, no Hip Hop foundation in it at all. The chorus is really simple, need to work on your mixing so you can learn how to make your chorus' better. The complexity picks up with your second verse, flow and scheme pick up. The beat was a nice selection. As for your quality, it sounded alright on this track. Need to work on some adlibs, etc... Just takes time with Cool Edit Pro. Overall, you got talent though bro. Keep working at it.
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Old 11-02-03, 08:14 PM   #8
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^ Thanks, man..
Upz for some more feed.
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