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Keys ft. Big Daddy Kane, The LOX and Jae Hood-Keys aka Vital
Mind Theory (warning, is very long)-wogzta

Open Mic:

Caught in a mindless slumber days are numbered
People are running for cover plummeted under
The convenience of society inequality is reality
Sin is done tactfully where all good is evil, naturally
The million dollar question there’s no real point to mention
The stress and the tension that accompanies life’s lessons
How can we ask when we have yet to comprehend
That the depths of our problems lay beneath the soul within
Satan is now kin complete monopoly, democracy
Hostility is rampant but no one’s seeing this hypocrisy
Where we choose to abide under one truth, the word of God
And pray to the Heavens to seek shelter under his laws
Then he turns his back and we resort to this nonsense
Of gats, knives, suicide, homicides, bloodshed is dominant
Politics lack common sense our country is still at war
But not with previous foes we’re at combat with our own
How can he promote peace and serenity, the U.S. is out of hand
I’m looking at this carefully but death is consuming our land
We can stop the tanks and bombs but can we stop kids who’re armed
Who go to school with nines and end lives, and yet see no real wrong
Or girls wanting to grow up to quick so at 10 they’re masked in make-up
If that wasn’t enough they hunt cats in need of having their jewels sucked
Society is poisoned by the ill will and falsehood of our own nation
Jesus crying beyond his gates for his own sin is his own creation
With no truths, no alibis, no time, futile minds, when will we realize?
The million-dollar question of our lives is: will we survive?

Im impressed by your multis!

The stress and the tension that accompanies life’s lessons
How can we ask when we have yet to comprehend
^ hmm i dont really see how the 2 last words rhyme

but i like the concept and structure!

that was ill

i usually dotn read open mics......

but this is a good one

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I didnt get to read everything but what I did read was on point keep droppin kid -1-

A well spoken, intellectual piece. I enjoyed it immensely. I tstarted out a little bit vague but the idea was definitely conveyed in the end. I give this a 9 on my personal scale of 1 to 10. But that's just my opinion.

Yeah i agree this was a good piece....the flow was on point through out the piece i thought, nice flow overall....the multies were nice in this...your vocab was good, nothing really wrong with that...nice way to end it...overall this was a good piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.

impressive....nice flow

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decent drop, great flow, i felt you could have made this more indepth, it was like you didnt say all that you wanted to, na'mean? but good read keep it up man peace

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

yo ur shit is tough still... THAT WAS A NICE PIECE... put down some more so i could study ur shit n get ma shit in check zeen lol... one fucking sentence didn't rhyme too tough who gives a FUCK, YO SHIT WAS TIGHT

aight the flow was good but a few times the comma threw it off
a comma is a breath so make sure you use them correctly

vocab was great here...

overall it was a good verse just try to up the wordplay some
imagry could be better

good drop none the less

good drop..some nice multis and flow was good..concepts a lil played but good none the less..good vocab aswell

keep droppin

hit up the link in mysig wud b apretiated

UPPIN FOR SUM FEEDBACK

I read this earlier and forgot to comment
I think that htis thread shows a lot of maturity and intellect behind the pen. I enjoyed reading and found no flaws in it. I would like to hear some more shit.

I liked it , it woz dope, gd lyrics , nuffin else to say really bout it except keep droppin!