yo, let me tell you about my hobbie/
Its my world like bobbie as i explain this shit quickly/
Sounds ameteur, this flow that my mind captures instantly/
Automatically, these lips move true and vibrantly/
So fuck all the pop stars still livin up to the mili vanili tactics/
Talking straight shit to them beautiful people as i work my majic/
No skills to back there ego, just a pretty face with a little plastic/
That shit aint in my book cuz i aint no muthafuckin faggot/
just anotha young cat trying to be funny like bob sagat/

Yo

This shit was short... lyrically, it wasnt so impressive. Some corny shit in there. Lmao@ Bob Saget. That cat is so fruity.

I guess it was a good message, I can feel you hating on these emcees and singers and shit poppin that mindless club hit garbage... but lately that seems to be the idea behind a lot of underground writing.

I did like the " its my world like Bobby" line... havent heard that before, lmao@ bobby's world show haha

I guess the only advice I can give you is to keep writing and try audio, once you start spitting in audio and practice youll automatically get better at text. Because text is only the first step in making an actual song. Dont let these net nerds confuse you and make you think that by writing a good song lyrically that youre an emcee.

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Yeah i agree it was short, you should work on making them longer atleast like 15-20 lines....work on your vocab, it should be up'd a bit....flow was alright could have been a bit better...you had some good lines in there though....overall it was a alright short piece, but try to make them a little longer next time...but keep at it...and keep dropping.