Child walks to the river, looks as far as she can see, and draws each breath as if it were the last, and wipes a tear that drops on her sleeve, so much loneliness built up inside, and they all say look at the child with the dream in her eyes, holding it deep inside her, longing for love from someone who excepts her for who she is and not the perfect child they want her to be, the only one who understands is the reflection in the river of the lonely child.

You Showed Me This On Aim... You ReallY Impressed Me.

Child walks to the river, looks as far as she can see
and draws each breath as if it were the last, and wipes a tear that drops on her sleeve

I Love That.

The Only Thing That I Think I Can Tell You, Is Better Structure.
I Know You Are New To The Site. Look At A Few Other People's Writings And See How They Present It When They Post It. Otherwise, This Is Dope, And Welcome To The Site.

this was a nice piece
the title had me thinking that it was going to be one of the same lonely poem, but when i started reading that thought left me quickly, i was really pulled into this, them emotion was definetly there, i really liked this piece, i dont have much to say, and thats hardly never
so.. nice piece
keep writin
keep elevatin hun

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."