|
|
|
|
| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
11-06-03, 12:49 PM
|
#1
|
||||||
|
Guest
|
Sketchbook Of Rain
IP: 3C39 37DB
This was a track i was working on with Ajax (R.I.P)
This will be an audio in due time beat: 'Endz' on the 21st Ave Productions SOundclick [Opens with raging storm sounds] [Voice starts out echoed but gradually becomes clearer] 15 Years Ago, A Miracle, Mother Gave Birth To Me... With Destiny Predetermined By Histories Of Geneaology... By Policy, I Find MCs And Relieve Them Of Swollen Heads... Not Leaving The Dead, Releasing Them TO The Depths Of Gravity... And Laugh As They Crash Down, Making Money Off Parity... So A2Z Serves Up Terrible Parables To Serve As Lyrical Clarity... All At Once MTVs A Painful Incision Jumping In My Vision... With The Precision Of Aerosol Pitted Against The Eco-System... My Spoken Words Are A Collsion Of Titans ... Taking The Advanced World Of Writing And Breaking Them Into Cubes And Prisms... With Meanings Hidden I Spit Venom, Silly Words That Rhyme To The Passer-By... Havent I Earned Your Respect Or Do I Need To Sacrifice More Of My Life? Stressing Over My Lines, Rewrite Ten Times Till They Sound Right... With Twenty or Thirty Songs Written That Will Never Reach A Mic... But Keep Going...Upgrading My Vocab Until Its Stunning... Cuz How Can A Man Eat If A Man Aint Hunting?... How Can A Man Eat If A Man Isn't Hungry?... Aint It Funny How A Kid From The Burbs, Only Fifteen... Can Be More Real Than Any MC You See On MTV?... Bittersweet Irony, One Of The Few Not In It For The Fame... Cuz The Taste Of Victory Is Sweet, Playing A Black Mans Game... I Savor It, Suck The Nector Out Of The Rap Soul... And Spit It In The Face Of Every Chingy Talking Asshole... This Is My Dream...Gladly Weathering Any Pain... A2Z, Ajax RIP....In My Sketchbook Of Rain... I know it look jumpy now, but it flows nice with the beat |
||||||
|
|
11-06-03, 04:32 PM
|
#2
|
||||||
|
Guest
|
IP: 4577 CD9A
upity up up ^^
|
||||||
|
|
|
11-06-03, 04:37 PM
|
#3
|
||||||
|
Guest
|
IP: 8CA6 9951
The flow was good. .It wasn't complex but it did stay nice throughtout. .never once fell of your scheme. .Lines were meaningful. .Some o'kay punches there. .Yeah. .overall qute a good drop bro. .Pz
|
||||||
|
|
|
11-06-03, 04:55 PM
|
#4
|
||||||
|
Guest
|
IP: 19AF 50C1
I ADMIT I FOUND THIS TO BE MOST ENTERTAINING....
I REALLY ENJOYED THE VERSE |
||||||
|
|
|
11-06-03, 05:06 PM
|
#5
|
||||
|
Banned: Permanent
|
IP: 5F2A E1C0
Nice Verse.. Probably Better
On Audio Probably. Not A Bad Drop Though. The Structure Could Use Sum Work.. But Nice Drop Nun The Less Hit That Up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php? |
||||
|
|
|
11-06-03, 05:54 PM
|
#6
|
||||||
|
Guest
|
IP: C1DA C961
ay that was a nice verse and cant wait to hear it on an audio but in text the structure and rhyme scheme through me off the flow a little but other than that it was raw.
|
||||||
|
|
 |
| Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
| Display Modes | |
|
|
Linear Mode
