Gateways open up a breakaway from reality
That shatters me Only to cast the demons outta me
Casually do I open my eyes Cuz they're heavy
Tears are steady And I fear so often that Im ready
For wat ahead me Minus the word "of" it was intended
Deadlines extended in my life Reason ... Unmentioned
A choppy sentence Is only elementary when it's seen
Behind bars in a penetentiary Mile's green beyond the streams
And pastures ... Clean My bones are perfect ... Heart is fractured
Witness the rapture ... My tails too childish for me to capture
Juss ask her ... I tried but she keeps tellin' me lies
The look in her eyes Tell me there's no need to reply
So I ... Juss do me cuz it's always me that I do
So veiw closely ... And you might see that it's you
But. Not exactly juss someone you can relate to
A prosecutor of the jury Wit no powers to debate you
But I hate you ... Well not you but the demons that dwell
Inside of your shell ... Sometimes I wanna juss wish you hell
And when I say you ... Well ... I mean me but wat I see
When I look at you and see wat I wish I could be
But to be is not the question The queery is not to be
So sloppily composed ... Wit satan standin' atop of me
Watch and see ... Or watch and read ...
To get the across im tryna get a point ... At this moment
Im juss as confused as U are ... So don't feel so lonely
Im juss as .. abused as U are ...
And so are my bars the way Im writin' them ... But Im doin't it on purpose
To give you the feelin' I had when they were wrote as you are recitin' them
Fingernails ... Im bitin' them Hopin' I don't start to bleed
Now Im at the state of being I hopr ur at when U start to read
No need to proceed any further cuz my ink is startin' to fade
Well not really Im typin this ... It's juss an excuse Im usin' to escape ...

Blah ... Juss a heat of the moment key ... Like it ... Or hate it ... Watever ... Peace

Uppin ... Peace

aiyyo what's goin on wit the crew nigga?

Gettin' bacc 2gether ... Go peep the thread in crews ...

wow man you know i really liked this piece.....One thing i kinda wished you wouldn't have gone in to the whole bars talk and what not took from the emotion....Honestly though the first two verses were amazing man....really appreciate the non-simplictic minds..

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cunt....my reply got wiped out
anyway i iked this verse
had an unusual way of writing for some parts which is always good
the opener really held my attention after that it became simpler..but i find in my more complex pieces i often use simpler vocab
the flow hardly dropped off if at all...liked the content
anmd the last part was a great touch
i love that kinda writing at the end..
props

Thanks for the replies peeps ... Uppin for more feedback ... Peace

Mentill that shit was dope as fuck....really enjoyed it a lot
a verse with immaculate flow.....All around a good read.

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